Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, how to use children’s spare time more effectively and practically has been a controversial debate. A multitude of people are of the opinion that parents should let their children to play games or sports whenever they are not able to spend time with their children, other hold other perspective, stating they should assess their children with their homework at that time. I profoundly prefer allowing children have fun with playing sports or games. There are several reasons, two of which will be explained in the ensuing essay.
The most paramount reason to mention is that with the paramount importance of the intellectual development of children, letting them playing games improve their skills in the real lives. It is mandatory for children to learn all of the communicational skills as an early age. Playing games as a member of a team like with their parents, will provide a golden opportunity for them to not only learn how to interact with others but also how to be more creative in playing. My personal experience demonstrates a compelling evidence for this. When I was in high school, I was considered as an insecure person, for I was taught that as a student, I should solely study. Never had I ever attended any kind of social activities or even plying games with other, I was terrified of communication. Since it was critically important for our teacher that parents dedicate special time for playing with me, eventually I became more assertive.
Another noteworthy and exquisite reason that comes to my mind is that sports assess children to be more active in their lives. Needless to say, the best way that we can aid new generation to boost and enhance their health is asking and offering them to attend all kinds of games such as soccer. Either outdoor activities like playing soccer or indoor ones such as playing pin pong, provoke children to be more active. As a result, these kinds of activities, especially if will be perform by the help of their parents, on one hand brings happiness for them, on the other hand boost and better relationship between parents and children.
All in all, I would rather children play game and sport so as to boost children’s relationship with others, their self-confident, and help them to not be passive
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, as to, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91025641026 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78864160928 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530769230769 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6973215696 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.6875 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270565089673 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855227151927 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738742639487 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173584955977 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982468586661 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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