Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Since the dawn of civilization, human beings have allotted some portion of their time to their children doing diverse activities. Hence, the fact that spending time with children plays an important role in prosperity of families, is undeniable. This brings up a long-running debate that to what activities should parent allot their times when they are with their children. A large portion of people believe that spending time for helping children in their schoolworks is a more rational decision that playing with them, but some others assert that it is the other way around. In my own perspective, I think the second notion is true. In what comes next, the reason why I go for the second notion will be elaborated.
It is a widely held axiom that parents should care for their children by caring for what they like. To put is more simply, spending time with children in their favorite games and activities is the best way for parents to show their love to their children. As a result, children become more satisfied and they will put their entire focus on their other duties such as schoolwork. In accordance with a research, conducted by Stanford psychologists, students who spend their free times playing their favorite game with their parents are more likely to be happy than those who do not. Generally speaking, children who their parents allotted time for them feel their parents love and are more satisfied in their live. Hence, playing with children gives rise to their happiness and they will prosper in other aspects of their lives.
Another important point that is worth mentioning is that the positive effects of playing with children on parents can not be ignored. In is obvious that playing is a good mean for parents to establish a good rapport with their children. Hence, parents who play with their children have a sense of satisfaction with their lives. My uncle, as an example, goes to gym with his son in his free time. They spend a lot of time with each other and they both are happy. Conversely, my aunt has allotted her free time to help her children. As a result, they are like teacher and students and can not understand each other. Therefore, it is highly recommended that parents should allot time for playing with their children in order to deepen their relationship and increasing their self-esteem.
Considering all aforementioned reasons, we may reach the conclusion that parents who allot their free time to playing with children are more likely to have a high self-esteem. Moreover, care for children's favorite activities will help them to feel their parents love which results in their success indirectly.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to support y 70
- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to 63
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...families, is undeniable. This brings up a long-running debate that to what activities should p...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'conversely', 'hence', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'i think', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224948875256 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.167689161554 0.158761421928 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0920245398773 0.0866891130778 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0306748466258 0.046263068375 66% => OK
Pronouns: 0.102249488753 0.0685040099705 149% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.132924335378 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0449897750511 0.0351676179071 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.58357784964 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0286298568507 0.0309702414327 92% => OK
Particles: 0.0040899795501 0.00188951952338 216% => OK
Determiners: 0.0654396728016 0.0887237588012 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0204498977505 0.0209618222197 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0265848670757 0.0139019557991 191% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2646.0 2387.08602151 111% => OK
No of words: 447.0 408.028673835 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.91946308725 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319910514541 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248322147651 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167785234899 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10067114094 0.112833075102 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58357784964 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436241610738 0.524397521467 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.879271086 59.2087087015 81% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.3181818182 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4640140702 48.84282405 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.272727273 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3181818182 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 45.1503965833 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.34013605442 1.45489161554 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46366964076 0.300154397459 154% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121937521193 0.103427244359 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0816792049604 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.502473645863 0.497263757937 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136881121153 0.151897553556 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175349636581 0.114077575197 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103151167354 0.0781384742642 132% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.47932535256 0.336927656856 142% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0960645951937 0.067059652881 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.351307854432 0.210909579961 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682055112639 0.0618886996521 110% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.