some people prefer to work more hours and get paid more others prefer to work less and get paid less which one do you prefer and why

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some people prefer to work more hours and get paid more, others prefer to work less and get paid less. which one do you prefer and why?

Whereas some people prefer to work more hours and get paid more, I’d rather work less and get paid less. I feel so for two reasons that I will explore in the ensuing essay.
Firstly, I achieve more with my kids’ well beings when I work fewer hours. In other words, I can take care of my family when my time is more flexible. I invest time in raising my sons and making sure of their well-being. Take my personal experience as a compelling example of this. I work part-time since I gave birth to my first son. Obviously, I’m a mom of two kids. My kids are still young and need most of my time. They can’t prepare their food on their own, and they need my help with their studies. Thus, their needs are fulfilled when I devote half of my time to their urges. Accordingly, I earn my paycheck from my part-time job, but I manage to cope with my children’s demands at the same time. If I didn’t exchange my full-time job with a part-time one, I wouldn’t have been able to balance my job and my family. Therefore, a part-time job with less paycheck is more rewarding for the physical and mental well-being of my children.
Secondly, although you get a lower paycheck, you can manage your time to enroll in courses that are beneficial for your career. To be specific, some courses require attendance in the middle of a working day. Thus, with more flexible working hours, it is possible to attend these courses without conflicting with your part-time job. This will have surprising results in your career. My friend’s experience is an illustration of this concept. She used to work as a full-time lecturer at the university. She was too busy that her week was occupied with many work-related tasks even on the weekend. This affected her career progress negatively. Not to mention, she couldn’t manage her time at all, because in her free hours, she was too exhausted to achieve any side task. However, this situation changed when she replaced her full-time job with a part-time job. Surprisingly, she was able to handle her time properly and finish her master’s degree. Because she had more time to study through the working week. Consequently, she got promoted to an assistant professor in a short time with a higher paycheck. If she didn’t work a part-time job, she wouldn’t have progressed quickly in her career.
To sum up, working a part-time job with less paycheck is better than a working full-time job. Not only because it’s crucial for my kids’ well-being, but it is also rewarding for career progress.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 946, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...roperly and finish her master’s degree. Because she had more time to study through the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, whereas, as to, i feel, in other words, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2093.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70337078652 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64020558281 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494382022472 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.5811127599 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 69.7666666667 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8333333333 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169973846271 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574109486905 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133955110121 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201152725429 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.219555016534 0.0645574589148 340% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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