At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
use specific reasons and examples to support your reason
There is no doubt that the university is the golden gate for students to real life. They should get the best benefit out of this experience in every possible aspect they could, and that's why I agree that sports and social activities should receive equal financial support as classes and updating libraries. I will further elaborate my reasons in the next passage.
First, having a gym hall and various sports fields available for the students is crucial for their physical and psychological health which helps with their concentration in their studies as well. For example, Students could use the gym when they get tired or bored of studying for long hours, this way they would charge their bodies with energy and could also socialize when meeting new people at the gym which is essential for their psychological health as well. However, some people believe that playing sports would distract students, this claim turned out to be wrong. In fact, there is a study that has been conducted in the university of California, it concluded that students in universities with sports facilities and social activities get higher grades and concentrate better than students in universities with no sports nor social activities.
Moreover, some students find out about their talents when the option is there. For example, my friend from high school his name is Tim, Tim never had access to a basketball field while growing up so when he went to college, luckily it had a basketball field so he joined the team for fun at first but later on the coaches found him so talented that they insisted he should join the official university team and participate in the university championship. Eventually, he became a professional basketball player. So, he wouldn’t have had this great opportunity if there wasn’t a basketball field or advanced sports facilities at the university.
In conclusion, I believe that sports and social activities to many students are as promising and life changing as academic classes. That’s why they should be funded as much as classes and libraries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06140350877 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73407448657 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.4947730354 48.9658058833 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.153846154 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188013377312 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663401528282 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651310601329 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133875392806 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811763230051 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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