Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, advertisement plays an important role in the economy of a country. Although some people think that advertisement can promote buying unnecessary commodities, I, personally, do believe that advertisement can bring us some advantages--that is awareness about products' features and the opportunity of comparing stuff to make the best decision--which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, in today's hectic lifestyle time is like "gold' for people. Of so great significance is the time that people should try to use it as useful as possible in order to live a prosperous and comfortable life. Needless to say, the advertisement can play an important role as to the amount of time anyone needs to spend in order to find products which they want. Thanks to the advertisement, for instance, people can easily keep track of the information of every item on TV, the Internet, radio, to name but a few. Without advertisement, however, individuals have to check all malls and shops every day which is a really time-consuming and impossible way.
Additionally, it is said that advertisement can bring the opportunity of comparing goods in order to find the best one. People are said to have some criteria--such as quality, warranty, price, color, to name but a few--in order to buy products. It is crystal clear that advertisement can be like a "resume" for products which presents how valuable a stuff is. Therefore, showing different features of a product, and also providing enough information about their application tend to help people whether these products have worth of spending money or not. Indeed, the advertisement can be such a useful way that helps people to make the best decision. However, if a person buys goods which are not necessary for him or her, it will not has to do with advertisement. Rather, without doubt, they have not thought enough before buying something.
In the light of these crucial advantages, I strictly believe that advertisement and publicity can play a useful role in order to ameliorate people’s lives. Advertisement, not only can decrease the time needed to buy a stuff but also can help people to find a product completely compatible with individuals’ need.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, therefore, as to, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31844162962 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518005540166 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9323447524 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.5625 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239371624548 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792627440191 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516988917282 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162018717109 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407549012824 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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