Some people say people taking risks can be more successful than people who are careful and cautious. What is your opinion? Please give specific details and examples in your answer.
Since the dawn of civilization, facing new things has been being overwhelming and frightening for humankind. He always preferred to stay in his comfort zone. Based on this regard, a heated debate has been aroused about the importance of taking risk in modern life. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that people who take risks are more successful than people who are careful and cautious, while others hold the precisely opposite viewpoint. I firmly agree with the first group for some rationales, two of which I will elaborate to substantiate my perspective.
First, a noteworthy point to be mentioned is that by taking a risk, we will be able to learn new skills and broaden our horizon, which are key factors to become successful in our life. Furthermore, when we take a risk, we definitely face adversity with a lot of hurdles and difficulties, so we need to use our knowledge and abilities to overcome those problems and ameliorate the situation. To be more precise, I can exemplify my personal experience. When I was in university and study bachelor degree, I always had fear about being teaching assistant, but one day, I had to enrich my resume, so I accepted my professor's offer to be his teaching assistant. Although I faced a lot of perplexing problems that semester, I learned a lot of valuable things and improved some of my skills such as how to speak in public, delve into the topics and have interaction with others as a teacher. It is axiomatic that if I had not taken the risk that time, I would not have procured those invaluable experience and enriched my resume.
Another equally point to be considered is that taking risk is the best way to uncover unforeseen opportunity. Needless to say that incremental changes can occur in a pretty safe way, but if someone wants a transformational and huge change in his life, career, and education and become successful, he needs to deviate the common way and do something that nobody has done. There are a lot of examples of successful people in the world, whose taking risks are the main key in their success. I can exemplify TOYOTA automotive company which is the biggest and the most valuable corporation in the world. In late 1980, Toyota chairman established a project and took a big risk by investing millions of dollar on it to produce luxury cars which can compete with others. Finally, that risk led to the appearance of Lexus Company which nowadays brings a lot of revenue annually for TOYOTA.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned grounds lead us to consider taking risks as an important factor in being successful. Hence, it is highly recommended that people and companies try to take a risk and face it in the crucial points of life which, without a shadow of a doubt, outweighs its drawbacks. Not to do so will definitely sow the seeds of ignorance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80566801619 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85311445485 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534412955466 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5864603947 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.7 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25956525031 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759987530082 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106843932846 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165809637077 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801635354742 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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