Some people say people taking risks can be more successful than people who are careful and cautious. What is your opinion? Please give specific details and examples in your answer.
It has always been a controversial question that why some people achieve prosperity, but others cannot. In one hand, someone say taking risks is one of criterion which brings prosperity, and people taking risks can be more successful than people who are careful and cautious. In the other hand, opponents believe people taking risks are in danger of a great loss, and they will success rarely. There are strong grounds for believing that people taking risks can be more successful in their lives, and the following paragraphs will aptly elucidate them.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that no precious goals will be achieved without hardships. If a person wants a breakthrough in his life, he should accept big risk in the path even it is not clear. For a classic instance, we can point people who accepts the danger of shipwreck or even die in the path of finding treasures in stories. Although these people usually fail in many of these stories, but I think in real world, the more risks you take, the more achievements you unlock. For clarify I can mention our company manager as a person who takes risk, and he is really successful in my perspective. I remember last year our company approached to products delivery deadline, and our products was in the process of design and development yet. As a rule, this stage should be finished first, and then manufacture process can be started. If a company manufacture products during design and development, there is a great risk that product will not work proper and accurate, for it is possible that products need to change, and in this way, all former manufactured products should be discarded, and it is great waste in time and money. By the way, our manager accepted this risk, and gave order to start production. At the end, there was some minor problems in products, but they were acceptable for customers. Without that risk, our company would never meet the deadlines.
The second noteworthy reason is that even people do not success when they take risks, they gain a lot of experience for future. When people take risks, they will face many problems, and when they get used to find a solution, their thinking will become critically, and they can analyze situation easily to find the best route. I accept that maybe they cannot find the best way at first, and it might be challenging, but I think this process should be passed for any successful persons. For example, we can take our previous story about our CEO as a sample. We should accept that his decision was unreasonable at first, and if things went on differently, it was possible that the whole company went bankrupt, and I can say he has a great chance to overcome problems. Although if we do not consider his win at this problem, we can still talk about the experiences he got during this obstacle. The whole thing that I want to say is that he is a manager because of his such decisions, not just for his successes.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to draw a conclusion that people who take risks and face dangers are probably more successful than who do not. It is highly recommended that people do dare and take risks in order to achieve prosperity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
... of a great loss, and they will success rarely. There are strong grounds for believing...
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Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to finding'.
Suggestion: used to finding
...l face many problems, and when they get used to find a solution, their thinking will become ...
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Line 13, column 150, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...ngers are probably more successful than who do not. It is highly recommended that p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, still, then, for example, i think, in short, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2652.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 562.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71886120996 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58726264904 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457295373665 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 18.0 1.86738351254 964% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0353867833 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298272088308 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986248578804 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974014216637 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238043183202 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118171229576 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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