Some people think governments should spend as much money as possible exploring outer space (for example, traveling to the Moon and to other planets). Other people disagree and think governments should spend this money for our basic needs on Earth. Which of these two opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer
In the 1960s and 1970s, world was observed competence of two global powers: United states and Soviet Union. Both countries had an ambitious space plan and spent a lot of money to prove that they are better than another. After Soviet Union collapsed in the 1990s, these plans did not very important anymore. The cold war is passed and the United States is a leader in space programs. They allocate a lot of money to such programs that are belonged to American tax payers. As many of people believe, spending much more money to astronomy is not logical and economical anymore. Actually I agree with them that the world needs this money more than space. In my perspective, government should spend this budget to improve our educational system, invest on green energy researches and rehabilitate our damaged economy.
First of all, our educational system is not efficient anymore. The rate of students whose abandon schools are increasing each year. Quality of meals is like a disaster. The facilities are getting old and outdated. Those can be used as antiques. For instance, our school's computers are very old. We even could not run Office on them. Furthermore, most of the students prefer to quit school and find a job to learn some useful skills because our educational system only teach theoretical materials. As our headmaster told me, they do not have enough budget to equip laboratories. Consequently, it is not logical to spend money on space while our school have to cut off expenses of equipping laboratories.
Second, our planet is damaged by using petroleum. The earth is going to warmer and warmer due to the Green House effect. We need to invest more to find solution. We found that green energies like solar, ocean and wind power are suitable and will be economical in future if we assign more money to increase their performance and efficiency. For example, we have a lot of sunny days in California and Nevada that can supply sufficient electricity power to us. In addition, we need more investment in electric cars that can be next generation of cars. They can solve city pollution problem. I think our governments should support start ups like Tesla that is a pioneer in Electric cars. Tesla manufactured a car which travel more than 200 kilometers in each charging period.
Finally, we should be realistic. What will people gain with spending money on space? We have many unsolved problem in earth and our country. Our economy is damaged due to participation is several wars. We lost many jobs. Many companies were bankrupted. Making money is become harder, then, spending money is less than past years. Consequently, our companies does not have enough customers to sell their products because people do not have enough money. For example, I used to buy new shoes every three month but now, I have to extend it to every six months or even once a year. Furthermore, I need to be optimistic about future of my children. Will they have a job in future? By this trend, I do not think so. Because the economy is getting worse and companies have to fire more employers. We need to bring money to economy to keep it alive. Thus, we need money for our economy more that money to discover space.
In conclusion, although allocate money for space investigations is prestigious, we need it to rehabilitate our planet. We need money to establish a high performance educational system. We need money to invest in green energies to survive our planet from destruction. And we need money for recover our economy and make more jobs. It will be better governments pay much more attention to their people instead of their ambitious. We make our future, not Aliens!
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this can' or 'Those cans'?
Suggestion: This can; Those cans
...acilities are getting old and outdated. Those can be used as antiques. For instance, our ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3053.0 1977.66487455 154% => OK
No of words: 629.0 407.700716846 154% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85373608903 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00798087137 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66023494688 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476947535771 0.524837075471 91% => OK
syllable_count: 974.7 618.680645161 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 31.0 9.59856630824 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 48.0 20.6003584229 233% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.045298847 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.6041666667 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1041666667 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52083333333 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 20.0 4.88709677419 409% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302123283047 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661389365278 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651232826087 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17864041955 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572976636427 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.96 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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