Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have a good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Needless to stay, nowadays humankind is much more occupied than the past, as they have many tasks to do in their career. This brings up a highly controversial question regarding whether individuals should stay in contact with people or not. In my view, People will benefit if they say with people, particularly with their friends. The reasons behind this standpoint are associated with the increasing relationship and having pleasant times, explained in the following paragraphs in great detail.
To begin with, having contact with others makes us strengthen our relationship. In other words, when people say with other, they will be able to share their interest with each other. This means that friends will be more satisfied with spending time each other. Therefore, people intend to spend their time to one another which in turn will cause our relationship last more time. My own experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. When I was a university student, I had a friend, namely Reza, at the beginning of the friendship with him, I did not talk with him more time and our relationship only was restricted to send a regard to each one at the university classes. One day, I decided to allocate my time to him and thus I invited him to the party, which was a personal party in my house. In my house, both of us talked about class time and university courses. After a few minute communicating with him, I discovered a lot of attributes existed in my behavior. I had not had any information regarding what is his favorite car before I interact with him. Not only did we share our interest but also we strengthen our friendship. After that time, we used to meet each other at our leisure time, helping us to reinforce our relationship. Currently, we are friend with each other, meaning that our friendship lasts 20 years. Therefore, one of the benefits of having contact with a friend is to reinforce relationship.
The second point worth discussing is related to having enjoyable moments. In fact, each person had various entertainment in their free time and if people say with others, it is likely that they will enjoy their moment. One example will suffice to illustrate my point. As I previously mentioned, I tried to say with my friend in my spare time. This decision was a critical one in my life since I used to work during weekdays at a company, causing me to feel stressful and tired. However, by dedicating time to leisure activities on the weekends with him, I am able to be amused during weekends, helping me refresh my mood. Every weekend, we gather together at our home and play our favorite musical instruments. Although both of us are not a professional music player, we entertain each other by doing so. Consequently, saying with people, especially with friends lead us to have more enjoyable time.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that it is beneficial for people to stay connected with friends due to strengthening relationships as well as having pleasant times.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, in my view, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87596899225 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85432946292 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3298896602 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8571428571 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.96428571429 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248801134999 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815184514277 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686719151283 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154974429633 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496583515259 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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