To educate students well, every school should have at least 2 lessons about violent crime per semester so that students can have more experience in their life to prevent themselves from bad situations. Although teachers already attend training classes about these problems, I agree that people who come back from prison and change to be good citizens often give a better lecture about these problems to students.
First of all, these people have already reformed their life so that they have plenty of experiences and skills in how to avoid bad danger in nowadays society. Students could be trained to realize some signals when they are tracked or they are bullied; moreover, people who are reformed can teach them how people who are reformed can teach students some method to handle these bad people. For example, last month, one student in my class shared that she met a rapist on the way home and thanks to the lesson about preventing crime last month, she knew how to let the police know and the policies came to help her.
Another benefit that the teenagers receive when talking to these people is that students can listen to the story about their bad past to have a lesson for students selves’. Besides that, reformed people can let students know what teenagers should avoid so that they will not become bad people in the future. I once saw an individual who used to be a bad student who smoked and drank; however, after the day he listened to the guy come back from prison, he realized that smoking and drinking is not cool and he knew that he has to focus on studying well to become a good citizen.
All things considered, there are a variety of benefits when students listen to the talk from people who are reformed. Students can solve problems related to criminals so that they can keep themselves safe from every bad situation they face.
- The diagrams show changes in a student common room 59
- The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now 11
- Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime To what extent do you agree or disagree 81
- Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies Which opinion do you agree with Use specific reasons and details to support your 78
- The chart below shows the percentage of people of different age groups who went to the cinema once a month or more in one European country from 2000 to 2011 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, moreover, so, well, as to, at least, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71076923077 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25319444503 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516923076923 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.4825741891 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.1 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 20.6045352989 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254382208872 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116342676056 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694996460283 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165380647526 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627435211493 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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