Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Independence is am extremely vital quality to have in order to be successful in life. The passage above asks for an opinion whether an individual should gain independence from their parents as soon as possible or should live with them for a longer period of time. I believe that being independent and standing on your own feet as soon as possible is the way to go due to the following reasons.
Firstly, I believe that living with our parents limits us in innumerable ways. The way we take decisions, the way we deal with situations, the way we handle ourselves financially, everything is affected in some way or the other if we live with our parents. For instance, recently I came across a situation in my house, where our maid was not able to come and cook for us due to personal reasons. So in order to make food, my mother had to step up. But it was not that difficult for her because she already knows how to cook. Now imagine if I was living alone, I would have to be responsible for myself and learn how to cook for myself. In other words, I feel that living with parents makes us limit our scope of learning.
In addition to that, I believe that financial awareness is a huge factor to help us survive. Having financial knowledge is really important and it is a necessity to have knowledge about it. But I experienced a very challenging situation. Recently, as we all know, COVID-19 hit the world and thousands and thousands of people lost their jobs. My father was one of those unfortunate ones. He lost his job and hence, lost his primary source of income. But due to his financial intellect, there were other sources of income too, like investing in the stock market and mutual funds. He is independent enough to take care of his family and himself, even without a job. If I was in his place, I wouldn't be able to deal with this situation in such an impeccable manner. According to me, in order to learn how to deal with uncertainties and predicaments, living by youself is really important.
These examples, in a way, tell us how advantageous it is to live with our parents. But it is morally incorrect to do so. By coming into this world, it is our obligation to step up and take care of ourselves. The faster we become independent, the better it is for us and for our parents. It is unethical to live off of our parents' money and live in their apartments. Everybody requires privacy and it is not right for us to snatch our parents' freedom. I am not saying that living with your parents is wrong, but being totally dependent on them for our survival should not be our approach towards living life. After all, our parents want the best for us too and want us to be independent. We should gain independence as soon as possible and make our parents proud.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...e or should live with them for a longer period of time. I believe that being independent and s...
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Line 5, column 689, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...without a job. If I was in his place, I wouldnt be able to deal with this situation in ...
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Line 5, column 763, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...situation in such an impeccable manner. According to me, in order to learn how to deal with unc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, really, so, after all, for instance, i feel, in addition, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2271.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47928994083 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63999210856 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46942800789 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.358365784 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3103448276 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4827586207 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58620689655 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230736923045 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605889756993 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558167906412 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150315232081 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586719316299 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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