Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Becoming an adult is a really special time in anybody’s life and the call to head out into the world and embrace our independence is, for many people, quite powerful. I think this can depend on a lot of different factors; for example, somebody starting a job might have different needs and priorities compared to a person who intends to go on and study at university. Generally speaking, I believe that it is better for all concerned young adults, continue to live with their families for a longer time, particularly if they are going to be studying at university or something similar.
First of all, it’s important to consider finances. Certainly, it is possible for some young adults to get work and support themselves relatively quickly. However, in most part of the world these days it costs a lot to rent a house, attend university, buy a car or purchase things like health insurance. By way of example, I can recall trying to live independently outside the family home as a university student and I constantly struggled to pay the bills and meet all the other costs of living as a young adult. This, in turn, had an adverse effect on things like my study performance.
Hence, in addition to the importance of finances, I think this is better for a young adult’s study potential. With your family’s support, it is a lot easier to focus on your studies. Of course, for some people in some situation, the family situation may actually be quite distracting or stressful. However, I think it would be fair to say that(for most people) you are likely to eat better meals, have a quiet place to study and do school work and get a decent night sleep if you happen to be living in the family home. I can recall my friend from my university days who lived in a shared house with other students. Life was a party for him but he didn’t eat or study well and inevitably his grades suffered. He had to repeat several subjects and finished his degree later that many of his peers.
Finally, staying at home one’s parents doesn’t mean necessarily mean that a young adult can’t develop independence. I will be the first to admit that there are parents out there who struggle to acknowledge that their children have grown up and deserved treatment as an adult; it’s instinctive of them to continue to play a mothering role that can actually be quite stifling for a young adult. Despite this possibility, even though I spent most of my university days living with my parents, they respected me as an adult as well as their child and they didn’t attempt to interfere too much or limit my independence. I think this is the case for many other your people as well, so I don’t think it is necessarily fair to claim that, just because someone is lining with family, they are somehow unable to enjoy benefits of independence. In fact, I believe the safe environment of family abode is a good place to handle the transition to adulthood for all concerned, both the child and the parents.
By way of conclusion, based on the argument explored, I’m of the opinion that in most cases it’s actually more beneficial for most adults to continue living with their families for a longer period of time. Families are precious things and an essential part of the fabric of the nurturing society, So I have strong believe that they can be a powerful guide in helping children negotiate the path to independence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Line 9, column 325, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...the nurturing society, So I have strong believe that they can be a powerful guide in he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, i think, in addition, in fact, of course, as well as, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2855.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 600.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75833333333 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7992062367 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483333333333 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 911.7 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5376580764 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.772727273 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2727272727 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63636363636 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307029677548 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921205611887 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691994317216 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184919817061 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250164252184 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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