Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?
1、to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community
2、learning to play a sport
3、learning to play a musical instrument
time management is an interesting concept not only for young people but also for adults. that is why developing good habits are crucial for future life and career. With so many temptations an young adult can easily waste their time but I thing taking a part-time job or volutering for a community would be most beneficial for the future because experience that people gather in such activities are very valuable.
Experince is one of main criteria people get a job in a company. Sometimes experience is even more valuable that actual teoretical skils that is why we should gather job experience from early age. In both part-time jobs and volutinring a person will learn how to interact with other colegues, will learn how to communicate an opinion and finish a task. All these are general and applicable for any other job on the market therefore people that have such experience usualy do better at new jobs. When I was a student in the colege from second year I was working part-time in an internet cafe taking care of computers. I am electrical engenerr major and that experience was so important that after my graduation I received a good job on my speciality altought responsabilities were different interviewer was convinced that any job experience counts.
Another reson to get a part-time job is that one becomes financialy independent. we all aim to become independent beeings and choose own destiny. Moreover parents that support financialy their children usualy also impose strict rules for career choises or express partener preferences. All these factors could cause a lot of disatisfaction for a person even depresia. If I compare statistical data from Europe we see that in north countries adults are independent ar early age and surprisingly happines ranking in these countries is also higher that comparing to southern countries.
In conclusion I think as young adults should start thinking about beeing independent from early age. Benefits are for future career and overall life satisfaction.
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- Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school which way can bring them the most benefit 1 to accumulate work experience by a part time job or volunteering in a community 2 learning to play a sport 3 learning to play a musical instr 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1303030303 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89973400509 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578787878788 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.0275359472 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8125 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.625 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185959848588 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568032182451 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047188259115 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986467794932 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645359847471 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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