Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit? 1. To accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community project 2. Learning to play a sport 3. Learning to play a musical instrument
Societies around the world have different opinions about how to raise children. I believe that working experience by either having a part-time job or participating in community projects is the best way to benefit young people. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, it teaches children to appreciate what they have. Sometimes a person should know what others do not have, In order to appreciate what they already have. A good example of this is my personal experience. My nine years old son Hadi had a community work project last month at his school. He was asked to help the community by participating in a food packaging project for a shelter near his school. I was very thrilled by this task, so he can learn some essential values of helping others in need. After finishing his project, he talked to me about how much he appreciates having a warm home and a loving family that cares for him even without asking.
Secondly, it's a convenient way of instilling significant habits and values in young ones. It's always better to learn things from an early age as it builds a solid foundation to start with. When I was fifteen years old, when it was the summer vacation, I used to help my uncle at the pharmacy that he worked in, and for that, I used to receive a salary as a reward. By doing this work, I became very responsible and learned how to be independent, especially financially, from a young age. As a result, I never struggled when it was time for me to leave for college abroad.
To sum up, I strongly recommend parents push their kids to do more community work and have jobs in their free time to be more responsible and appreciate what they have.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, still, i feel, as a result, to start with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66901908034 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3504221156 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.125 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236006793587 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0742159282902 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698169039719 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14727333796 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487913430356 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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