Without a shadow of a doubt, extracurricular activities play a pivotal role in gaining new skills and abilities. An unanswered question in this area is how students should spend their leisure time. Despite the arguments asserting that they should allocate this valuable time to physical activities and engage with playing a sport, I believe otherwise, maintaining that young people should learn new skills through experiencing a part-time job or participating in volunteer activities in the society. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
The first exquisite point corroborating my stance on this subject is that students can get ready for their future careers by experiencing social activities like a part-time job or being a member of an organization. Performing assigned duties in a limited time teach them to manage their time efficiently and work as a group. Also, they learn how to communicate with varied types of people and enhance their social abilities. Furthermore, these activities increase students' self-confidence because they realize their abilities in various areas. For instance, had I not worked during high school, I would not have overcome my fears of speaking in front of audiences.
Another reason to be mentioned is that those young students who experience part-time jobs or are members of a volunteer organization are more likely to improve their educational performance in universities. When high school students involve in different activities, they notice the value of time. So, they do not squander their time and energy for trivial matters and devote their time to their more important tasks. Moreover, they are familiar with different techniques helping them in doing arduous homework and project. For example, they find it easy to divide a complex project into small parts. Therefore, they never lose their motivation when their professors oblige them to do a difficult assignment. In addition, a survey conducted in my university has revealed that students who have a job during their free time are more successful in managing their stress before exams.
Reflecting upon all the reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that the most beneficial option for young students to guarantee their future is doing a part-time job or participating in volunteer groups.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40489130435 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98023255704 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570652173913 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4548475125 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275895980842 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088526154838 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468115079507 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17265845438 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234737586316 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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