Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
There is no doubt that friends play a pivotal role in any individual's life. They affect people in many ways in each and every state of life. I contend that their influence on students’ life is even greater than that of the teachers. I will explore the reasons why I feel this way through the following paragraphs.
First, students, especially in young ages, emulate what their peers do in order to feel accepted and be able to make friends. They try to follow their friend's style and manner without considering ethics. This is mostly because students fear from being lonely and excluded and they believe acting similar to others will attract more students to them. This blind imitation can have adverse impacts on their personality and may put them into serious troubles, such as drug addiction. However, a professional teacher, who is well aware of these desires could prevent that and encourage students to care about moral values. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school, most of my peers regarded studying as an embarrassing thing to do. They did not study at all and humiliated whoever studied. I was a hardworking student at first, but after being teased by them I became disappointed. One of my teachers noticed the change in my scores and talked to me. She reminded how intelligent I am and made me feel more confident. Hence, I did not pay attention to my classmates and worked hard. Now I am a successful professor and I owe this to my caring teacher.
Second, many children trust others of the same age rather than grown up individuals. They share the same feelings, interests and concerns, which will form a closer bond between them. Therefore, they are more prone to be affected by those in their same age. The age gap between students and their teachers causes their relation to seem untrustworthy, and they prefer the company of their friends. In this regard, I have a fourteen years old sister and I can see that she believes what I say better than what my mother says, since I have less age difference with her compared to my mom. This shows that young people can be influenced by their peers rather than their teachers.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that students, particularly in early ages, are affected by their friends rather than their teachers. This is because they want to be accepted among their peers and they can trust people around their age.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...that friends play a pivotal role in any individuals life. They affect people in many ways i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...their peers rather than their teachers. In conclusion, I strongly believe that s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79334916865 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60950771722 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555819477435 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0571384121 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.72 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.84 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393872104714 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102337285151 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121186988564 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252899617448 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837999912775 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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