Without a shadow of a doubt, extracurricular activities allow students to express themselves outside of the classrooms. An unanswered question in this area is how students can impact their surrounding environments. However, some arguments asserting that the best humanitarian aid is volunteers visiting older people, I believe otherwise, maintaining club members should prioritize the providing accommodation for needy individuals. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
The first exquisite point corroborating my stance on this subject is that if a place is afforded for low-income families, they can increase their welfare. In most parts of the globe, especially in urban areas, people allocate a considerable percentage of their income to satisfy their necessities, housing. Accordingly, if families do not have to pay or save money monthly for purchasing or renting a house, they can respond to higher needs. They can enroll their children at universities that guarantee the kids’ future. Furthermore, decreasing the financial pressure gives parents a chance to find a decent career and leave their low-avenue jobs. Therefore, the implication of this type of charitable assistance is preventing the perpetuation of poverty.
Another motive to be mentioned is that physical and mental health are closely linked with owning a suitable house. These days, the sharp population growth has intensified the housing crisis, so the number of homeless people is increased progressively. Due to low nutrient income along with injuries not cured, these persons are susceptible to a high risk of mortality. Additionally, living in unhealthy refuges leads to suffered infectious diseases like HIV, Influenza, and so forth. Besides physical health issues, they experience mental ills like depression and suicidal thoughts that negatively affect them and society. A survey conducted in my country revealed that most criminal activities contributed to homeless populations that were not hopeful of their destiny.
Reflecting upon the grounds mentioned above, one soon realizes the best decision for club members contributes their support to house problems.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72865853659 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1246043771 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.673780487805 0.524837075471 128% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.0547366855 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.529411765 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2941176471 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112686656362 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319450907693 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.026770804165 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0670608880613 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217866324461 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.95 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.69 8.01818996416 133% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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