The subjects such mathematics, writing, reading used to be taught in school. some people think that it is necessary to add fourth subject: computer skills. Do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that each subject has its contribution in students lives. While science and mathematics enrich students basic skills and knowledge, art boost students creativity and imagination. It has been claimed that subjects like mathematics, writing and reading are sufficient for the students, while others think that computer skills should be added as a fourth subject for the students. As far as I'm concerned, I agree with the later statement. the basis for my views is as the following.
Nowaday's computer has become the most important device that students can possess. Computer became essential not only for the students information developing, but also for their study process. Of course, others subjects like mathematics and science are also essential for the students to possess. However, computer add a great help for the students. For example, Students can use their computers to access the wild wide web to access valuable information and study material instead of being restricted to school library hours and location. In addition, Students can utilize their computers to take class note, submet assignment or work on homework. Since the introduction of computer devices, the computer has been a great helper for the students.
In addition to it significant contribution in students lives, possessing computer skills became essential for both industrial and commercial level. Given that most of the factories operated by machines and computer system, computer skillfull students have greater chances to work compared to unskilled ones. For example, Most of the pharmaceutical factories job advertisements required all the applicants to possess essential skills in computer systems like Word, Excel and Powerpoint. If the applicant lack of required skills, their applications are rejected at the first interview level.
Finally, computer is the most effective and time efficient way of communication. Given that regular mail could take up to two to three weeks to reach its final destination, the use of emails, Skype, and Facebook is more practical than other forms of communications. Students can study, discuss assignments and finish their task by communicating with their college using computer. Yet, communication through computer can be used by employees to address certian issues or machine errors. Instead of wasting their time waiting for their peer's replay, students and employees can effectively use the internet to communicate instantly.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that even though different subject has it share in students development, learning computer skills significantly enrich students development as a whole. Therefore, schools should do their utmost to introduce computer subject and encourage the students to participate in computer class.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: There is no doubt that each subject has its contribution in students lives.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and lives
In addition to it significant contribution in students lives,
In addition to its significant contributions in students' lives,
most of the factories operated by machines and computer system,
most of the factories are operated by machines and computer system,
Sentence: While science and mathematics enrich students basic skills and knowledge, art boost students creativity and imagination.
Description: The fragment mathematics enrich students is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace enrich with verb, past tense
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and creativity
Sentence: Computer became essential not only for the students information developing, but also for their study process.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and information
Sentence: Of course, others subjects like mathematics and science are also essential for the students to possess.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and subjects
even though different subject has it share in students development,
even though different subjects have their shares in students' development, //plural
Sentence: Given that most of the factories operated by machines and computer system, computer skillfull students have greater chances to work compared to unskilled ones.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to computer and skillfull
Sentence: As a conclusion, we can safely say that even though different subject has it share in students development, learning computer skills significantly enrich students development as a whole.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and development
Sentence: In addition, Students can utilize their computers to take class note, submet assignment or work on homework.
Error: submet Suggestion: submit
Sentence: Given that most of the factories operated by machines and computer system, computer skillfull students have greater chances to work compared to unskilled ones.
Error: skillfull Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Yet, communication through computer can be used by employees to address certian issues or machine errors.
Error: certian Suggestion: certain
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 427 350
No. of Characters: 2313 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.417 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.874 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 116 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.422 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...rth subject for the students. As far as Im concerned, I agree with the later state...
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Line 1, column 455, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...rned, I agree with the later statement. the basis for my views is as the following....
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Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...puter became essential not only for the students information developing, but also for th...
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Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unskilled ones. For example, Most of the pharmaceutical factories job advertiseme...
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Line 9, column 78, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shares'?
Suggestion: shares
...at even though different subject has it share in students development, learning compu...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'no doubt', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.313684210526 0.229887763892 136% => OK
Verbs: 0.136842105263 0.158761421928 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.08 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.04 0.046263068375 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0357894736842 0.0685040099705 52% => OK
Prepositions: 0.122105263158 0.118717715034 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0463157894737 0.0351676179071 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.96453966889 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0336842105263 0.0309702414327 109% => OK
Particles: 0.00210526315789 0.00188951952338 111% => OK
Determiners: 0.0631578947368 0.0887237588012 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0210526315789 0.0209618222197 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0139019557991 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2801.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 426.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 6.57511737089 5.86048508987 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.448356807512 0.338922669872 132% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.368544600939 0.251872472559 146% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.291079812207 0.174417080927 167% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.166666666667 0.112833075102 148% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96453966889 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539906103286 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 62.4504298157 59.2087087015 105% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5217391304 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.145804537 48.84282405 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.782608696 120.699889404 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 20.5533526081 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.644075263715 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 55.3761992243 45.7405998639 121% => OK
Elegance: 2.26732673267 1.45489161554 156% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305138430465 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.098258129583 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0594315016009 0.0752933317313 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514254362479 0.497263757937 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.11825363704 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113082110467 0.114077575197 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583662188903 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.362540440258 0.336927656856 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0901059249415 0.067059652881 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20282862526 0.210909579961 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214931307798 0.0618886996521 35% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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