For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
There is no shortage of debate whether it is more important to be successful in school or to be able to relate well to other people. In my opinion, it is more advantageous to be able to relate to people. I feel this way for two main reasons which i will explain the following essay.
First of all, By relating to a character which you are familiar in your life, you can get more experience. While schools can be mostly theory, Walking in someone's lifestyle can make you experience what they have already been through. In addition, one can connect emotionally with that person's life too. My own experience is a compelling example of this. As i was going to architecture school, i always felt it was more important to reach out to people who are working in the field and spend most of their time doing professional work outside of the university instead of paying more attention to academic fields. although academic research can be important, making use of them is a professional act that mostly happen outside the schools of architecture. As a result, I had the chance to learn from certain experienced and well-known architects in the field and be able to walk in their pass which gave me more practical knowledge than i could ever learn in school. Now I enjoy a successful line of work. For this reason, i strongly believe that it is more important to relate to people.
Secondly, schools are a place to teach a group of people. So, for it to be practical it needs to be more general in terms of teaching methods. On the other hand, one can find the best way for himself to learn and gain knowledge on their field of work by studying other people work related to his job. You can name many successful people who never paid attention to school and to how much study for it, but instead they tried to find out what others do in their field of work. As an example, i want to mention steve jobs. From the start of his academic study he did not pay much attention to it. Instead he went to follow those before him that were successful in his field of work and went on to work for them. As he worked a while for Microsoft. Later he became so well-known that he became their first rival in their field of work. Accordingly, I think following other individuals way of life and trying hard on your goals are more important than just doing well in school.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better to relate well to people than to do well in school. This is because on will get more experience and the learing is more personal that school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45299145299 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5270036962 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452991452991 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.052186717 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8333333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346698545918 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987600556366 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810040662238 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24561163024 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422220511249 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.6 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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