Suitable Career is a crucial concern of all people in the life. Individuals try to find job which give them a best benefit. Whether people enjoyable more with three days work with long hours or five days a week for short hours. This can be weighed in may aspect. Admittedly, some believe, working three days weekly is nore convenience. This mainly because, they will make employee to have more spare time. In my perspective, I do not concur with this statement for a couple reasons, Which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, long hours work will stress workers. This is because, they will feel tired and a lot of pressure put on them. As a result, they can not focus and concentrate in their tasks. This is example from my real live. I have been working as a dental assistant for three years. At the beginning of my job, I chiose to work only on tuesdays, wednesday and thursday. Therefore our schedule become to long. We have been working from 8 AM to 6PM . With the time, I recognize this schedule very hard and make me feel stress and uncomfortable. My joint become hurt and return back late to my kids. Moreover, There is no opportunity to prepare dinner to my family since, there is no enough time at all. So, we rely on fast food. As we can see the negative impact of long hours working on our social life.
In addition, when employees feel stressful and tired, they can not do perfect performance. as a contrast, working five days make worker well concentrate on their tasks and get a good results. Furthermore, employer will rise worker position when he figure out his good achievement. According to my example which I mentioned above, I decide to work five days a week instead of three. This will help me to do my job in perfect manner without struggling in tight schedule. In conclusion, it is obvious how is working five days a week is more effective to me and to my patients.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands. This is based on exposition which are mentioned above. Working three days a week is stressful and less beneficial because the results will be less efficient.
Suitable Career is a crucial concern of all people in the life. Individuals try to find job which give them a best benefit. Whether people enjoyable more with three days work with long hours or five days a week for short hours. This can be weighed in may aspect. Admittedly, some believe, working three days weekly is nore convenience. This mainly because, they will make employee to have more spare time. In my perspective, I do not concur with this statement for a couple reasons, Which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, long hours work will stress workers. This is because, they will feel tired and a lot of pressure put on them. As a result, they can not focus and concentrate in their tasks. This is example from my real live. I have been working as a dental assistant for three years. At the beginning of my job, I chiose to work only on tuesdays, wednesdays and thirsdays.Therefore our schedule become to long. We have been working from 8 AM to 6PM . With the time, I recognize this schedule very hard and make me feel stress and uncomfor. My joint become hurt and return back late to my kids. Moreover, There is no opportunity to prepare dinner to my family since, there is no enough time at all. So, we rely on fast food. As we can see the negative impact of long hours working on our social life.
In addition, when employees feel stressful and tierd, they can not do perfect performance. as a contrast, working five days make worker well concentrate on their tasks and get a good results. Furthermore, employer will rise worker position when he figure out his good achievement. According to my example which I mentioned above, I decide to work five days a week insteed of three. This will help me to do my job in perfect manar without struggling in tight schedule. In conclusion, it is obvious how is working five days a week is more effective to me and to my patients.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands. This is based on exposition which are mentioned above. Working three days a week is stressfull and less benefecial because the results will be less efecient.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...viduals try to find job which give them a best benefit. Whether people enjoyable ...
^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l explore in the following paragraphs. To begin with, long hours work will stre...
^^
Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...y on tuesdays, wednesdays and thirsdays.Therefore our schedule become to long. We have be...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...y on tuesdays, wednesdays and thirsdays.Therefore our schedule become to long. We have be...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 449, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...g. We have been working from 8 AM to 6PM . With the time, I recognize this schedul...
^^
Line 2, column 566, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
... and uncomfor. My joint become hurt and return back late to my kids. Moreover, There is no ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 725, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... time at all. So, we rely on fast food. As we can see the negative impact of long ...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...long hours working on our social life. In addition, when employees feel stressf...
^^
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...d, they can not do perfect performance. as a contrast, working five days make wor...
^^
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t do perfect performance. as a contrast, working five days make worker well conce...
^^
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'figures'.
Suggestion: figures
...loyer will rise worker position when he figure out his good achievement. According to ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...use the results will be less efecient.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56135770235 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65640190538 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522193211488 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7964740294 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.3928571429 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6785714286 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453283778886 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111832785558 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124742933434 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288517015735 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23368497875 0.0645574589148 362% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...viduals try to find job which give them a best benefit. Whether people enjoyable ...
^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l explore in the following paragraphs. To begin with, long hours work will stre...
^^
Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...y on tuesdays, wednesdays and thirsdays.Therefore our schedule become to long. We have be...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 373, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...y on tuesdays, wednesdays and thirsdays.Therefore our schedule become to long. We have be...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 449, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...g. We have been working from 8 AM to 6PM . With the time, I recognize this schedul...
^^
Line 2, column 566, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
... and uncomfor. My joint become hurt and return back late to my kids. Moreover, There is no ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 725, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... time at all. So, we rely on fast food. As we can see the negative impact of long ...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...long hours working on our social life. In addition, when employees feel stressf...
^^
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...d, they can not do perfect performance. as a contrast, working five days make wor...
^^
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t do perfect performance. as a contrast, working five days make worker well conce...
^^
Line 3, column 251, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'figures'.
Suggestion: figures
...loyer will rise worker position when he figure out his good achievement. According to ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...use the results will be less efecient.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56135770235 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65640190538 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522193211488 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.7964740294 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.3928571429 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6785714286 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.453283778886 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111832785558 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124742933434 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288517015735 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23368497875 0.0645574589148 362% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.