Television advertising directed towards children from (1 year to 5 years) should be banned.
Do you agree or disagree?
These days’ children watched a lot of television because they have been sitting home. And parents to want to work they think that television will distract their child. But they don't understand on what level they are getting distracted. In my opinion television advertising directed towards children should be banned, I completely agree with it. It is my firm belief is that what children watch can be controlled by not the advertisement, and I will develop the ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, children are not mature enough to understand that why these advertise is made the way it is showed. They get super influenced by advertisements. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by a known experience of my neighbour child who is 5 years old, she is so influenced by an advertise which is about skin care product where a girl is shown who is dark skin and has acne and then when applies cream she looks fair and clear. After watching that Ad, the 5 years old girl say doesn't talk to dark skin people, she thinks they are not good. As a result, that advertise as affected the child's naive mind and made it impure. So it is important that such advertisements should not be allowed.
Secondly, at the end the advertising companies have to sell the product and for that they show thing in unrealistic ways. So the children get attracted to the things and want whatever they see on television, the toys, the candies and etc. And the parents, for their child to be happy and not make chaos, have to get their child the toys or candies they say. Basically, the children get habitual and it creates a problem for parents. Drawing from my own experience my nephew is addicted to junk food because of television and his parents have lots of work, so they just give them whatever he wants so that he doesn't shout or throw things. It's certainly clear to see why the advertisement companies should at least think about these children who are also watching their advertisement.
In the light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that these advertisements should be stopped because its crystal clear that these advertisements affects children in bad ways, children get aggressive or get angry if things are not given which are shown in the advertise and they take different meaning of the advertises which is not good for the children.
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| 2021-05-12 | Shrushti Krishna Vishwasrao | 70 | view |
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, at least, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73860911271 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70365799894 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491606714628 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.3611626382 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.777777778 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228292732072 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772075168156 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800831899728 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150396152461 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401740591416 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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