In modern society, television can be a source of entertainment or information. However, we cannot always know the truth just from what television tells us, as the information comes from only a select number of people rather than diverse opinions.
Nowadays, many television channels have sponsors or corporations funding them, and in turn the sponsors often have a say in the content of the channel. This means that what they broadcast is what they want you to perceive the situation. For example, different news broadcasting companies may have opposite opinions on the same story, due to their sponsors’ interests. We can see that television may not be as objective as it may seem.
Another is that TV shows often play on stereotypes, instead of showing all aspects of a person character and personality. Actors with certain looks or characteristics are often chosen to act out a stereotype, such as people talking to the “foreign student” extremely slowly. As a matter of fact, these shows may cause people, especially children, to have biased and incorrect viewpoints on others. However, it is obvious that human nature is much more complex and diverse.
While television gives us an opportunity to see the lives of other people all over the world, its depiction of people is often not complete nor accurate, as they reveal to us only what they want us to perceive. In conclusion, I agree that television does not give people an accurate view of human nature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ture is much more complex and diverse. While television gives us an opportunity...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1229.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 245.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01632653061 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89541135485 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616326530612 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 382.5 618.680645161 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.347438595 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.416666667 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288042341237 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10367230078 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.180525560975 0.0737576698707 245% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15750075148 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15522579353 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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