Advertisements are one of the main parts of the shelling of a product. Companies use advertising proceduder in order to show their products in the best way possible. In my opinion, marketing specialists have made nowadays advertisements, despite their fundamental utility for attract potencial buyers, to reach a level excesively unreal and usually the advertisements overstimate the value or the characteristics of the product that they represent. I feel this way for two main reasons which i will explore in teh following essay. First, advertisement does not tell any of the disadvantages of the product. Second, usually they do not show realistic analysis of the product in real operational conditions.
To begin with, advertisements are fundamental for marketing pourposes and tend to represent an idealized product that never fails. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Almost everyone has or have had, at least, one smartphone at home that did not work properly. When you watch the advertisements all phones are amazing, they usually perform better than the rest and they seem indestructible. However, when you use them everyday sometimes you can feel how it is not wrking very, usually they start to lose battery to fast, or their screen cracks with a minimum touch.
Secondly, despite of the basic characteristics and specifications of the product are usually indicated, not allways companies make reference to all of the test performed over the product before reach the market. My own personal history is proof of this. Making reference again to smartphones, the advertisment of one of my first ones tell how you could use it under the water. The advertisement said that this smartphone was waterproof, but this adjetive did not refer to the fact that it can be used under the water, like the advertisment shown. They did not show their test, so people thought that the smartphone coul be used under the water. The tricky part of this was that the phone could resist little water drops and low moistured environments, not to be sumerged.
In conclusion, I belive that advertisements reflect just the best specifications of the product or its innovations, but the do not show the real performance of the product. This is because advertisement neither usually show disadvantages of the product nor show realistic analysis of the product in real operational conditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, at least, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18298969072 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16147409117 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502577319588 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6378991968 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.842105263 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4210526316 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184427711605 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628259727954 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397220985233 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122095016573 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280286978762 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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