Life is affected by myriad factors and experiences.
In any age, parents told children to study hard because they think that studying hard is the surest way to success.
As this stance seems to be more suitable for the current surrounding environment, I think people will be inclined to this stance.
To support my viewpoint, I raise two reasons in following paragraphs.
First of all, technology advanced intensify global competition.
Transportation development shortened our temporal distance.
Even information reaches all over the world in a moment.
Shortening of temporal distance means increasing the number of competitors. So far what has been done in your country is now being carried out abroad. Moreover, Artificial intelligence takes over human jobs. AI's evolution is fascinating. Some professor predicts that a lot of jobs will be replaced by machines. My college professor says that become a person who is using machinery, do not become a person being used in machinery. Children must compete not only with people all over the world but also with AI. Hence, Naturally, parents are profoundly concerned their children’s education.
Furthermore, Educational methods of successful people are open. You may have watched the media report about what kind of education the successful people were educated. As parents involved in education and increase needs, information media supplies answer information to it. And it invokes more interest in children's education. In the past, Because they did not know how to educate children to success, they only told children to study hard or let children do as them like. However, Today's parents can instantly know how to educate to success. Regardless of whether the educational method is appropriate for children, they try it. For example, my friend who has recently born children buy many books about children' education and educational toys which successful person played it. Lately, information on education is overflowing.
In conclusion, parents today are in a situation that needs education and easy to educate than parents in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tion is overflowing. In conclusion, parents today are in a situation that ne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42249240122 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96903392731 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604863221884 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1012282716 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.36 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.16 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.53405017921 221% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252904559341 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617189188198 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668888859698 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0760746669517 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902802401849 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.27 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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