TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Professors of a university are the core of the educational system because they are the main source of the information that students learn from. Some people think that if the salary of the professors increases, the quality of education rises a lot. Personally, I do agree that tutors should obtain more money for few reasons which I will elaborate on.
First, tutors will concentrate on their teaching more. Certainly, they are human and they need money to continue living, and if they know that the university is going to be a good source of money, they will put more effort to satisfy the university's needs for better education. For example, we used to have a teacher at school that had more than four children, and the salary from teaching was not enough for him, so he had to work out of school too. Sometimes he got to class late because he was busy with the other job. In addition to that he made a lot of phone calls in the time of the class. That is why we did not learn much that year.
Second, tutors of the university are going to spend more time if the university pays them well. If the professors stay more in their class, students can meet and see them more times to ask them question regarding the content of the classes or research projects. For instance, I had a friend in our university who was doing a very important research on cancear, so he needed some expert to always help him in doing labratory works. His tutor accepted to help him in his project, as the result they spent more than three hours in the labratory each day together.
Finally, professors deserve to recieve a good amount of salary. To be honest, teachers build the future of our nation, and if the university and professors understand their important role in the current world, both side pay more attention to the education.the university does not consider paying more money to the tutors is useless, besides that teacheres do their own job better even if they do not recieve enough money.
Basically, professors should earn good salary because they train the future leaders of our nation, and they can spend more time training these leaders and concentrate better on their job.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
we used to have a teacher at school that had more than four children,
we used to have a teacher at school who had more than four children,
Sentence: For instance, I had a friend in our university who was doing a very important research on cancear, so he needed some expert to always help him in doing labratory works.
Error: cancear Suggestion: cancer
Error: labratory Suggestion: laboratory
Sentence: His tutor accepted to help him in his project, as the result they spent more than three hours in the labratory each day together.
Error: labratory Suggestion: laboratory
Sentence: Finally, professors deserve to recieve a good amount of salary.
Error: recieve Suggestion: receive
Sentence: To be honest, teachers build the future of our nation, and if the university and professors understand their important role in the current world, both side pay more attention to the education.the university does not consider paying more money to the tutors is useless, besides that teacheres do their own job better even if they do not recieve enough money.
Error: teacheres Suggestion: teachers
Error: recieve Suggestion: receive
flaws:
Don't use or use less personal experience as examples. It is going to create a lot of simple sentences and words. look:
For example,
we used to have a teacher at school that had more than four children, and the salary from teaching was not enough for him, so
he had to work out of school too. Sometimes
he got to class late because
he was busy with the other job.
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2 //Double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1743 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.527 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.402 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.993 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Professors of a university are the core ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w reasons which I will elaborate on. First, tutors will concentrate on their ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...why we did not learn much that year. Second, tutors of the university are goi...
^^^
Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'very important research'.
Suggestion: very important research
... friend in our university who was doing a very important research on cancear, so he needed some expert to...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in the labratory each day together. Finally, professors deserve to recieve a...
^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... they do not recieve enough money. Basically, professors should earn good s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66753246753 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46567804548 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498701298701 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.9297569215 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.3125 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0625 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127510901208 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440176245505 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464693277151 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817242229183 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267205067135 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.