TPO-41 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, schools have been one of the most important source of expanding knowledge, and people respect teachers because of their high position in society. One of the most controversial questions about this subject is if teachers were more valued in past or in modern time by society? Some people think that teacher were appreciated more in the past; however, in my perspective, teacheres have a higher position nowadays for few reasons which I will elaborate more.
First of all, tutors receive more money in the current world. The government gives a lot more salary to teachers because they are preparing new workers for the country and if they are not payed well, the produced workers won't have high productivity and it decreases the overall strength of the nation in world. For example, my older brother was studying in a school that were poor and didn't have money to gives it's teachers a good salary. Since it was a privet school the government didn't give any fund to the school so the teachers of the school didn't work hard with the students and didn't teach them well. At the end, none of the students of the school passed the national exam. But nowadays the government is responsible for that school and gives a lot of money to the teachers and the school has become the best school in state.
Furthermore, parents are connected with tutors more these days. Due to prescence of mobile phone parents can call teachers or teachers can call parents whenever it's necessery. Because of this new connection parents are familier with teachers more and respect them more because of their efforts in rising and teaching children, but in that time parents didn't have any contact with teachers; therefore, they were not aware of each other and if children did something rude to the teachers, parents didn't find about the behavior and were not able punish their children to respect the teachers.
Finally, knowledge is of great importance in the modern period. Back in past, the society didn't consider the knowledge and the school to be something crucial for their community and they thought someone has more value who earns more money, so teachers had a lower class amoung different careers. However, today, It's impossible that parents don't send their children to school because living without knowledge is not possible. everyone has some kind of profession that has learned from school. Therefore, teachers are considered the most basic element of teaching children a profession and society is in great need of better teacher, therefore they are appreciating tutors to compel them to teach better.
To wrap it up, based on reasons mentioned above, society values teachers more because it needs them to raise the overall level of knowledge of the society because of the important role that information and knowledge plays in world. the Government gives more salary to them and parents are connected to teachers so children don't dare to be rude to teachers.
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Essay evaluation report
one of the most important source
one of the most important sources
is if teachers were more valued in past
is whether teachers were more valued in past
Sentence: For example, my older brother was studying in a school that were poor and didn't have money to gives it's teachers a good salary.
Description: The fragment a school that is not usually followed by were
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace were with was
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to to and gives
Sentence: Some people think that teacher were appreciated more in the past; however, in my perspective, teacheres have a higher position nowadays for few reasons which I will elaborate more.
Error: teacheres Suggestion: teachers
Sentence: Due to prescence of mobile phone parents can call teachers or teachers can call parents whenever it's necessery.
Error: prescence Suggestion: presence
Error: necessery Suggestion: necessary
Sentence: Because of this new connection parents are familier with teachers more and respect them more because of their efforts in rising and teaching children, but in that time parents didn't have any contact with teachers; therefore, they were not aware of each other and if children did something rude to the teachers, parents didn't find about the behavior and were not able punish their children to respect the teachers.
Error: familier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Back in past, the society didn't consider the knowledge and the school to be something crucial for their community and they thought someone has more value who earns more money, so teachers had a lower class amoung different careers.
Error: amoung Suggestion: among
flaws:
No. of Words: 508 while No. of Different Words: 215 //it means the content is not developed efficiently
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 508 350
No. of Characters: 2425 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.748 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.774 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.464 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.701 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.586 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Throughout history, schools have been on...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...reasons which I will elaborate more. First of all, tutors receive more money ...
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Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...studying in a school that were poor and didnt have money to gives its teachers a good...
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Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e it was a privet school the government didnt give any fund to the school so the teac...
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Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...he school so the teachers of the school didnt work hard with the students and didnt t...
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Line 3, column 590, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...l didnt work hard with the students and didnt teach them well. At the end, none of th...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s become the best school in state. Furthermore, parents are connected with ...
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Line 6, column 357, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...hing children, but in that time parents didnt have any contact with teachers; therefo...
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Line 6, column 500, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...something rude to the teachers, parents didnt find about the behavior and were not ab...
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Line 9, column 70, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...t importance in the modern period. Back in past, the society didnt consider the knowled...
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Line 9, column 91, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...odern period. Back in past, the society didnt consider the knowledge and the school t...
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Line 9, column 341, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ver, today, Its impossible that parents dont send their children to school because l...
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Line 9, column 426, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Everyone
...ving without knowledge is not possible. everyone has some kind of profession that has le...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tors to compel them to teach better. To wrap it up, based on reasons mentione...
^^^
Line 11, column 133, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...needs them to raise the overall level of knowledge of the society because of the ...
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Line 11, column 237, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...formation and knowledge plays in world. the Government gives more salary to them an...
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Line 11, column 328, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...s are connected to teachers so children dont dare to be rude to teachers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98192771084 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49791529344 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443775100402 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.7799498065 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.578947368 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2105263158 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178218913144 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630354287463 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549996041439 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119105696983 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374230468801 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.