TPO 3: Agree or disagree: It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
By and large, it is established beyond any doubt that communication and making social connections play a prominent role in today's world. It comes as no surprise the efforts to finding the best ways of making friendship and keeping them have been always among the top priorities from the dawn of civilization. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is that whether people preserve their old friends or making new friends. It is commonly accepted that making new friendships is a dispensable event of one's life since according to circumstance and the condition that may happen, people oblige to changing their friends. While those who argue that keeping old friends is momentous because they passed many years with each other and know about behavior and secrets. I, to a great extent, concur with the former idea. The rationale behind this thesis will be elaborated by the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point that makes me hold this belief is that there will be conditions when people change their ways of life or behavior and their behavior is against to the other's behavior. In such circumstance friends oblige to break up and making new friendship which be similar to them. Without any shadows of doubt, friends affect each other strongly and if their behavior different from each other, after sometimes they will get the other's behavior. Perhaps a more specific example can shed the light on the matter. Consider two friends that one of them initiates to lying. If the other don't break up with him, one they he will involve in this behavior as well.
Another point deserving some words here is that some condition cause friendship is ended. It goes without saying that, for every one conditions are created that they oblige to translocate or live in other places. Consequently, new friendship is necessary due to the fact that friendship is an inseparable part of every one's life. As Majid Sameii, a well-known neurosurgeon not only in Iran but also all around the world, once said, most of the friendships are last at the maximum about 8 years since the more people get older, the more changes happen in their life which cause losing old friends.
Finally, yet importantly, new friendship causes new experiences for people. As a matter of fact, if people make new friendship with various visions and ways of life, they can experience new life. In such circumstance, they satisfy their life. Conversely, if people stay with same friends for a long time, they know everything about each other, have done their hobbies and there is not any new experience for them so they feel boring when they meet each other . As a recently conducted research at University of British Columbia, tracking life events of many students, they realized that students who make new friendship are more satisfy rather that people who try their best to keep their old friends.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, one can soon realize that making new friendship is a key factor in people's life since not only does it help to avoid improper behavior imprint in people behavior, but also because of the new circumstance in people's life they oblige to making new friends and experience new life. It is highly recommended that parents not underestimate the value of making good friends for their children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, finally, first, if, may, regarding, so, well, while, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, by and large, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2801.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00178571429 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65923784362 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478571428571 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0547631242 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.708333333 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54166666667 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199744007586 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661828087524 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570204599619 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13528306247 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481443691987 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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