Happiness and satisfaction are very important in our lives. When people are happy, they could live healthier and help others as well. The world is changing so quickly that people can't adapt themselves and can't enjoy as much as people in the past. It is an inevitable change that comes with our modern times.
The first aspect is technology that is advancing every day and it is hard to keep up with changes. For instance, our elderlies are having difficult times to adapt themselves to recent technological changes as well as people in their forties and fifties. My parents are bright people, but they are having difficulties adopting themselves with new gadgets like smartphones, computers, etc. They don't know how to use them properly and they feel unhappy about changes. This could easily affect people and cause them feel less satisfied with their lives.
Second, with growing population comes more needs and more people to satisfy. In that order, environments around us would change significantly in time. For example, it is impossible to get a straightforward address in Tehran, the city I live in, because elderlies prefer to use old names of streets and places instead of adapting themselves to new changes. The other problem is, the city is having too many changes in little time that everybody feels alienated. There were a few beautiful vast gardens that are being replaced with skyscrapers. Old memorable cafes and other ancient building are being replaced with malls, restaurants, fast foods, etc. In this way, people lose their feeling toward their hometown and eventually feel less happy and less satisfied.
The world is changing fast, and it is beyond our reach to regulate the pace of changes. Technology is getting more advanced and more complexed every day, and our habitat is changing also. We can't slow the ratio of changes, but we could regulate rules to preserve some aspects of our lives, like memorable places and public spaces, so that we could share common memories with future generations and live a happier life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 181, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...orld is changing so quickly that people cant adapt themselves and cant enjoy as much...
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Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...y that people cant adapt themselves and cant enjoy as much as people in the past. It...
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Line 2, column 394, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... like smartphones, computers, etc. They dont know how to use them properly and they ...
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Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... every day, and our habitat is changing also. We cant slow the ratio of changes, but...
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Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...y, and our habitat is changing also. We cant slow the ratio of changes, but we could...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, for example, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04117647059 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58274819433 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555882352941 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6992411643 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2105263158 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8947368421 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242968961434 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752336103536 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580766631112 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153501333001 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500467634656 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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