Working as a team is an essential skill that everyone must have to prosper in society. There is no better place than a school to teach children how to work together at their early ages. When teachers assign projects on which students must work together, the students learn much more effectively than when they are asked to work alone on projects. Let me elaborate my answer with two main reasons.
First, when students work together as a team, they could motivate each other, and their progress would excel enormously. For instance, when I was in Khaatam elementary school, I was in a mathematics group named Hogwarts; we were pretty excited about Harry Potter books back then. We were working as a team in order to achieve good results, and our grades were related to each other. Moreover, we were supposed to work on a math project for the final math exhibition, where our parents and relatives would attend to see our projects. That was an exciting plan, which while we were working on our homework or our projects, we were enjoying the process a lot. Our teacher, Mr. Bayrami, had a painting in his class; which was a boy who stroke the word hate and replaced it with love; the final statement was "I love mathematics." At the end of the course, we truly loved maths. That was a simple example of how working in groups could change the experience of learning and amend it for the better.
Second, working in groups could help students to reach better ideas and innovative solutions. For instance, I was in an architectural designing group a couple of years ago, and we were working for solutions to design better shelters for those in need; like victims of an earthquake, hurricanes or other natural calamities. We had regular gatherings in which we were sharing our thoughts, sketches, and models and discussing the positive and negative points of each of them. In those brain-storming sessions, we had reached novel ideas that were praised by some architects, and our project was supported and funded by The Architects Association in Iran; the country we are from. Our project was successfully built and experienced by those who were affected by Herris earthquake, and it was printed on Honar O Memari Magazine. That's my experience of how positive it would be to work in a group.
Teaching children how to work efficiently with each other in a group in early ages, could benefit them significantly, and that skill could become very handy in their future lives. They could learn the benefits of motivations in groups, brainstorming sessions and successfully evolve their projects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, so, then, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89819004525 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74196664336 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52036199095 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5249457507 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.947368421 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05263157895 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234931373074 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915085047189 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148068636074 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185539120597 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161376926815 0.0645574589148 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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