The reading passage mentions several merits of electronic medical record systems. However, the lecturer presents counterarguments against these assertions.
According to the reading, employing the electronic records can decrease the costs on storing as well as transporting substantially as paper records actually occupied space. In addition, electronic records allow doctors to acquire the records conveniently. The lecturer argues that doctors would still retain the paper records as they need back-up for emergency and signatures for legal reasons. Consequently, the storage costs are still required.
Also, the author claims that electronic medical records can reduce errors since it can avoid nonstandard forms and improper transcription of data. The lecturer points out that the doctors still use pen and paper to take notes and then the medical staff enters the information into systems. Hence, during the transcription process, the poor handwriting still causes mistakes.
Finally, the author further states that electronic medical records can benefit medical research as the large amount of data from patients are available in the systems. The lecturer challenges that the information of patients are difficult to access in practical since the privacy legislation in the US is very strict. Researchers may encounter complex procedures. Furthermore, it is highly likely that patients are reluctant to permit the access to their records.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1243.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 213.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.83568075117 5.08290768461 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90840428599 2.5805825403 113% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 145.348785872 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582159624413 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.2582928383 49.2860985944 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6153846154 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3846153846 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 7.06452816374 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.550129212515 0.272083759551 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.169296711962 0.0996497079465 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141121008103 0.0662205650399 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.305604168981 0.162205337803 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638381436399 0.0443174109184 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.3 12.2367328918 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.42419426049 115% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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