TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, education plays a vital role in every society's improvement. In my opinion, governments should invest more money in university students than children. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, university students are more enthusiastic about learning than kids. Pupils in the universities tried their best to be qualified as a university student. They overcame exams, such as Gre or Toefl, to be accepted in the universities. Therefore, they are more eager to learn because they know the value of being in a university student position, so the higher their knowledge gets, the better they can help the country through its development path. For instance, when I was a seven-year-old girl, my parents always got gifts for me to motivate me to study more, but now, as a university student, I believe being in the position of a student is the best reward for me, and nothing could be a better stimulus to study and try more than accepting in the university, and being aware of my importance in society's advancement in future.
Secondly, the youngsters at the universities are more reliable to take their responsibility to enhance their society in today's world. They are at the age in which they are wise enough to understand essential tasks that should be cared for to help the country's development so that governments can depend on them more than children. For example, when I was a nine-year-old girl, I always wanted to get rid of studying and thought it was boring. However, now as a sophomore, I understand its meaning, and how university students can make a great future available for their countries by doing research, or inventing new methods, or equipment which can make a big difference for the future of the countries, such as improving space crafts to become more knowledgeable of the space.
To wrap it up, devoting more money to universities is a more critical task than investing it in kids to improve the country. This is because young people at universities are more keen to learn and make a change for the future. Moreover, governments can more rely on them to improve the countries in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 832, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88978494624 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92083840203 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502688172043 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.435800895 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.266666667 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203425847886 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075123975318 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529238251295 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146907650452 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303824355504 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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