TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every new generation chooses different approaches for achieving their goal. What can help all human societies to gain their goals is setting a combination of suitable rules. In my opinion, setting strict regulations for youngsters is a vital task in every society. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, specific strict rules can help young people to maintain the direct path of obtaining success. Youngsters are always curious about new things, and they want to experience everything. This adventurous behavior can result in trying so many bad ideas, such as using drugs that can affect their whole life. Therefore, if society does not provide strict laws for young people, they may end up becoming unsuccessful adults who are a burden for other members of the community. For example, back to high school, I had a friend who was a carefree energetic person who always wanted to try something new — her interest in adventuring led her to become friends with people who were older than her. Her older friends took her to the night clubs, and after a couple of months, she became a drug addict at the age of fifteen. However, if there were more limitation rules in those clubs, they would save her from addiction, and she would become a better person in the future.
Secondly, the stricter rules will provide a more organized society. By the increase of population, every nation realized that if their appropriate set of rules and barriers does not exist, society will become a total mess. In other words, to make communities more disciplined, we have to have strict regulations which they protect society from anarchy. As a result, by more specific and limited rules, we can help young people how to follow the rules in the future, and that results in a whole organized, disciplined, unified society. For instance, when I was a fourteen-year-old girl, my teacher never allowed students who came late got into the class. Although it was hard for us at first, eventually, we learned how to become punctual. Whereas If our teacher did not teach us this lesson, even now, I might be late at my work, for not being an organized person. In that situation, my disorganized behavior put so much pressure on my colleagues.
In conclusion, strict rules are a fundamental issue for every society, and they are beneficial for young people because they can help them become successful adults. Moreover, they can lead youngsters to be more self-disciplined, which results in a more organized society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93055555556 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73551177869 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548611111111 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6341641485 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.14285714286 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111016956584 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357214043612 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424612290069 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069772927647 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145412024344 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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