TPO 39 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO 39 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People have different views on whether it was more or less difficult to find a secure job or get a successful career in the past. In my opinion, I agree with the argument that it was more difficult for people to opt for a thriving job in modern time. There are two reasons for my view which will be explored as below.

First of all, governments used to take control of most important economic disciplines in the past. As such, those industries heavily subsidized by state had more advantages for development as well as stable prospect. Consequently, employees working in those fields had a clear path to be successful. My own experience is a compelling example. The oil & gas and telecommunication industries were under completely control of Vietnamese government. Each year, the Vietnamese cabinet digged deep into their pockets to support those two disciplines. Therefore, employees were provided with excellent perks which cannot be found in any other field. I joined the Vietnamese national petroleum corporation 15 years ago and got incredibly high wage since then. This example shows how predictable it was to find a good career in the past.

Secondly, the emergence of technology and the internet have caused serious impacts on the prospect and certainty of various industries. Despite its capacity to boost the development of many industries, the introduction of advanced technologies is the main factor which is to blame for the fact that some careers used to be considered prestige were completely turned into trivial ones in a short period of time. As the result, there is no firmed guarantee of stable income and successful future for their workers. An example is the teaching career. Before the boom of the internet, students hunger for knowledge had to lean on their teachers for a better education. As such, lecturers were well appreciated by society which meant that they earned more than enough to make ends meet. Anyone who graduated with teaching background easily found a stable position in a public or private school. However, this fact is no longer true nowadays when online learning booms and students have many other choices for education.

In conclusion, my vote is put on the notion that we were able to find a stable and successful career a few decades ago more easily than we could today. It was because of heavy state supervision and subtle impact of technology advance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ely turned into trivial ones in a short period of time. As the result, there is no firmed guar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, more or less

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.025 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83142236886 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.508717719 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3636363636 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.40909090909 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111978938142 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.034821835989 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450832277877 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749577549195 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397703052921 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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