TPO 44 Writing Independent
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In the modern era, parents have busy lives and have many responsibilities in their lives. The fact that they spend a lot of time at work has caused them to have less time to spend with their children. In this regard, parents make efforts to use their free time with their children in the best way. The controversial question which arises here is whether the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports or is doing things together which are related to children's schoolwork. From my vantage point, parents should use the time to have fun with their children. In what follows, the most significant reasons will be explained.
The first aspect to point out is that busy parents have hectic lives. As a result, when they are home, they need some time to relax and free their mind from all the stuff that occupies their whole day. Moreover, they might not have enough energy to spend time helping their children with assignments and homework. On the other hand, children need time with their families to be away from school issues and have fun. Therefore, doing activities such as playing games or sports would provide a chance for both parents and children to relieve their daily stress and enjoy entertainment. For instance, my friend and his father go to the gym every day and spend time together. This activity could be a good way for both to unleash their stress and have fun together.
Furthermore, spending time with family playing games or sports would make provide a chance for family members to make their relationships stronger. Accordingly, children would become more comfortable. Over time, they regard their parents as their friends and in addition to getting emotional support, they can talk about their problems and the issues that have engaged their minds. But when parents just inspect the children's school work, children don't regard their parents as their friends and they may even hide things from their parents. For example, one of my friends spends time with his family watching TV or playing games. The reason that he spends his time having fun with his family rather than getting help for schoolwork has caused him to feel free to talk about his problems. That's the reason he is a relaxed person because whenever he faces a problem, he discusses that with his parents and they would provide very constructive suggestions for him.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that the most effective way to spend free time with children is having fun together. Although parents should devote some time to inspect their children's schoolwork and help them in those areas, the most influential way is to spend time with their children doing fun activities. Not only does it help parents to relax and have fun, but also it makes children enjoy spending time with their family members and establish stronger relationships with their parents. Moreover, the children could feel more comfortable to talk about their problems with their parents, and parents would definitely provide constructive advice for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2550.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93230174081 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46080582827 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419729206963 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3892067672 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.25 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5416666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54166666667 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.434606733563 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162378334515 0.076458572812 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929758084456 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338380783234 0.150856017488 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109251117027 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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