TPO 45- independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use s

Young people are the future of a nation. Development rate of a society is dependent on the educated young people. A person is considered as educated when he able to make decision own-self. So, it is necessary to determine own decision for young people. And I believe that today young people are more able to make own decisions than earlier. I have some reasons to agree with the statement.

Firstly, young people are becoming more educated than previously. Because of easy education process, they are able to get education easily. Every government of any country is focusing on education of young people. In our country, education is totally free for children. Even students get some incentive for going school and college. Therefore, I can tell that education is widely available for young people than past days. When a young person became educated, he able to judge about good and bad things. So, he can make his own decision without depending on his parents or guardian. For example, when I was child, I saw my elder brothers who were always confused to decide and asked help to parents. On the other hand, now I can see my younger brother who always make his own decision without asking any help.

Secondly, young people are getting more freedom than previous time. Advance technologies, modern science make young people more stable and confident to do their personal work. Because of modern technologies, they can get any information or solution in a short period which help them to decide quickly and independently. now almost everything can get on internet from any where. When I was in school, we barely know about internet and didn't have any easy access to internet. Now, it is impossible to think for a minute without internet. For any kind of help and information, our first preference is internet. Hence, available information, freedom , modern society make young people more deterministic and solvent to live without depending on parents to decide anything.

Finally, world is becoming more competitive and difficult to survive without working hard. So, every person needs to work arduously for better live. To survive a good life everyone including parents are becoming more busy. As a result they hardly have time to give their child. And it became their child more own dependable and children have to make their decisions.

In a sum, some may disagree with the statement because they think without experience, it is tough to make perfect decision for a young person. But education, modern technology and freedom make a young person more stable and give the confidence to take own decisions.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 692, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'parent'.
Suggestion: parent
...ys confused to decide and asked help to parents. On the other hand, now I can see my yo...
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Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Now
...em to decide quickly and independently. now almost everything can get on internet f...
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Line 5, column 368, Rule ID: ANY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anywhere'?
Suggestion: anywhere
...ost everything can get on internet from any where. When I was in school, we barely know a...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...hool, we barely know about internet and didnt have any easy access to internet. Now, ...
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Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t. Hence, available information, freedom , modern society make young people more d...
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Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cluding parents are becoming more busy. As a result they hardly have time to give ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, kind of, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00458715596 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63933192827 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467889908257 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8807156007 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.3870967742 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.064516129 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22580645161 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352042894993 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100400365775 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807180942593 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223742136348 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909423044994 0.0645574589148 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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