TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
It is undeniable that there are many events around the world. Every event is related to something different than the other event. In my view it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
First, the world becomes connected as a small village, and different cultures are mixed togather in several ways, so knowing what is happening around the world is essential to keep this connection. For example, my friend is married to a chinese man. He is very nice to her, and she is good to him as well. In his culture, they celebrate the Chinese year. Last year, my friend prepared a special party for him as a serprise in the Chinese year. He was happy about that, and their relationship became stronger when the share his event togather.
Second, the world is full of interesting things that we do not know. Knowing events happening around the world is one of the most excited thing that people can do. Back to my friend, she invited me last year to attend their celebration in the Chinese year. it was amazing. I saw how they dance, wear their clothes and what they eat. It was something new for me, and I had a lot of fun. Since then, I always try to look for events from different countries and learn about them.
To sum up, I think it is very important to about events happening around the world not only because the excitement they give to us, but also it helps in connecting people and countries to gather. In addition to that, I suggest that it wiil be good to our kids if they start learning about what happened around the world at young age, for instance, in their school. that will make them more curios about learning every new thing even if that thing is not related to their daily life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...event is related to something different than the other event. In my view it is impor...
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Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... their celebration in the Chinese year. it was amazing. I saw how they dance, wear...
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Line 4, column 366, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...ung age, for instance, in their school. that will make them more curios about learni...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, then, well, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4509202454 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27551338334 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515337423313 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1427340535 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.3684210526 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1578947368 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304789246176 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972325235294 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12495537706 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225925810499 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128181333261 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.61 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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