TPO 47
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no denying that people are now able to know events happening around the world through the Internet. I admit that there is a lot of opinions about whether we should know what events are happening or not; however, it is beneficial for us to be aware of the events which occur in the world even if they do not have a significant influence on our lives directly. I feel this way for two reasons that I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, we sometimes can be well-motivated by knowing the outstanding achievement of others. Many young people are talented in specific fields such as sports, arts and academic subjects, and we can easily know their activity through the Internet. By learning these surprising outcomes, we can be encouraged. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a freshman at university, I majored in physics. I was interested in physics, but I felt that some courses are pretty challenging to understand. I was about to lose my interest in physics; however, I heard the news that a college student in the United States could prove the theory that had not been proved for many decades. This news surprised me, and I began to think that I also wanted to prove the complicated theory in the future. Consequently, I could regain my motivation toward physics and could graduate from my university with honor.
Second, we can feel appreciate at peace in daily life. When we see some news through social media or TVs, we can find much negative news that happens in the poor region such as wars, the problems of refugees, and so on. We tend to take it for granted that peace is everywhere, but this negative news tells us that there were many efforts to achieve peaceful daily life. For example, when I see the news about Africa, I could know the problems about a shortage of waters or the danger of wars. By this news, I feel more appreciated in my daily life.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that we should know what events are happening around the world regardless of the influence of our daily lives. This is because we can sometimes be well-motivated about what we are doing, and we can appreciate the peace in daily life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, so, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62820512821 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65436140173 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492307692308 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2402953449 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161704556385 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548313951381 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503989776647 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119880734369 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678141052479 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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