We are in the society which means whatever happens to even for single individual that will impact on the whole society. So when something good or bad happens to someone, it is not only his/her personal problem it is problems of our society. So I disagree with point which states that we need not worry about whatever happens in the out side the world.
First of all, I want explore why we are suppose to know about what is happening in the world even if we are not hurts by that actions. The great sociologist Maslow says that everyone of should be having empathy on other. What you mean by empathy put yourself into others's shoe, meaning you should feel others problems from their perspective. For example, ISI problem they are killing thousands of people who are very innocent and these people are not sure about live even they do not know they are going shoot by others that is very pathetic situation today. By being in well secure area like america we can not feel their problems until we have empathy, on other word unless we feel their original situation.
Secondly, even the most personal decision making like suicide itself has interlink with the society, the norms of religion, persons, family and countries. So, when decision making about the suicide attempt itself, it does not have the own authority, it means that very individual problems are our problems and society issues. We neglect the other problems just like that. As human being we are six sense social animal and we are top in the animal kingdom. Moreover, we are not animal, to be selfish and not thinking about other issues.
Thirdly, if, we know about each others that will be good for us. By knowing what is happening around us we can know about some kind valuable information like collective behaviour. For example one the Indian mathematician found the square and the american found the computer all put together today gives lots of information about our universe birth, universe expansion theory and we are able to find out mysterious things happening underground area all it became possible because of the collective learning and behaviour.
To sum up, when society is consists of you,me and we then we are human being should be aware about ourselves not about myself or yourself. So everyone of must know things what is happening in and around us regardless of whether it has impact on you or not.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 22, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
We are in the society which means whatever happens to even for...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat will impact on the whole society. So when something good or bad happens to so...
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Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: OUT_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
...not worry about whatever happens in the out side the world. First of all, I want ex...
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Line 4, column 41, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'supposed'.
Suggestion: supposed
...First of all, I want explore why we are suppose to know about what is happening in the ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to otherss shoe, meaning you should feel others problems from their perspective. ...
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Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'interlinked'.
Suggestion: interlinked
...decision making like suicide itself has interlink with the society, the norms of religion...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... what is happening around us we can know about some kind valuable information li...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g around us we can know about some kind valuable information like collective beh...
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...For example one the Indian mathematician found the square and the american found ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s lots of information about our universe birth, universe expansion theory and we ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , me
... sum up, when society is consists of you,me and we then we are human being should b...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...of whether it has impact on you or not.
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'for example', 'first of all', 'on the whole', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.176991150442 0.229887763892 77% => OK
Verbs: 0.174778761062 0.158761421928 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0973451327434 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0663716814159 0.046263068375 143% => OK
Pronouns: 0.103982300885 0.0685040099705 152% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.137168141593 0.118717715034 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0442477876106 0.0351676179071 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.38241650905 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0132743362832 0.0309702414327 43% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00442477876106 0.00188951952338 234% => OK
Determiners: 0.0575221238938 0.0887237588012 65% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0176991150442 0.0209618222197 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0353982300885 0.0139019557991 255% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2423.0 2387.08602151 102% => OK
No of words: 414.0 408.028673835 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85265700483 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.330917874396 0.338922669872 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.24154589372 0.251872472559 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169082125604 0.174417080927 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0748792270531 0.112833075102 66% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38241650905 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 55.3440563006 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2116484952 48.84282405 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.611111111 120.699889404 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.777777777778 0.644075263715 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.54480286738 216% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.154589372 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.03846153846 1.45489161554 71% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274126848107 0.300154397459 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.131364156126 0.103427244359 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.071814663186 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.53007540579 0.497263757937 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.132294621763 0.151897553556 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111888849415 0.114077575197 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552077882056 0.0781384742642 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281686802889 0.336927656856 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0379099673433 0.067059652881 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189396044028 0.210909579961 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380893847976 0.0618886996521 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 8.42114695341 59% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.