TPO 47- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Nowadys, it is commomnly accepted that the importance of knowing about different happence in the world led to expantion a lot of news networks around the world. Because all of pahhence in the world surly affected our life even indirectly. Contrary, to thios popular beliefs there are still those who argue that most of the poeple are mainly busy with their own jobs and their daily works, and encouraging them for following news related to the far distance region is just wasting their time and energy. I, to a great extent agree with this idea that it is important to know about events happening around the world.
First and foremost, people through new can know about different cultural in the world. Today's, news netwroks interlouck all of parts of world together. In the past people had very few information about different people who lived far awaye from them and most of their knowledge about another cultural limited to their neghbeir countries. Or for example, some rare people who travel to fined new region. But today, the high developed news networks provide a great and very simple way to inform and aware from other area. Today, it is very rare to fine country that people do not aware from persence of it in the world. But in the past it was usual.
On another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that attention to problem and bad happence that may be happening around the world. We just through news can know about problems that defferent peole in the world are faced with it. This awarenees provide the possibility of helping people together. For example, if an volcanoc erouption happen in a country and create a lot of damge to people and buildings, most of the people even from different countinent send alot of helping box or money to help and improving their problem.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above I am convinced that it is very important to know about events happening around the world. because of, its important role in increasing public knowledge and attention to different situation of happen in the world.
- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. 73
- TPO 33 68
- In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 90
- TPO 45: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and ex 73
- Tpo 49 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... lot of news networks around the world. Because all of pahhence in the world surly affe...
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Line 1, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the world surly affected our life even indirectly. Contrary, to thios popular b...
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Line 2, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...different cultural in the world. Todays, news netwroks interlouck all of parts of...
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Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...d together. In the past people had very few information about different people who ...
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Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little information'.
Suggestion: little information
...d together. In the past people had very few information about different people who lived far aw...
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Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...elping people together. For example, if an volcanoc erouption happen in a country ...
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Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...bout events happening around the world. because of, its important role in increasing pu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, so, still, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80726256983 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4445171288 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491620111732 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9062705038 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.235294118 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05882352941 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265032494228 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965471788802 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978972724613 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190602321909 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0949767396176 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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