Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the importance of knowing about different happens in the world led to the expansion of a lot of news networks around the world. Because all of happens in the world surely affected our life even indirectly. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that most of the people are mainly busy with their own jobs and their daily works, and encouraging them for following news related to the far distance region is just wasting their time and energy. I, to a great extent, agree with this idea that it is important to know about events happening around the world.
First and foremost, people through new can know about different cultures in the world. Today's, news networks interlock all of the parts of the world together. In the past, people had very few information about different people who lived far away from them and most of their knowledge about another cultural limited to their neighbor countries. Or for example, some rare people who travel to find new region. But today, the highly developed news networks provide a great and very simple way to inform and aware of other areas. Today, it is very rare to find a country that people do not aware of the presence of it in the world. But in the past it was usual.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that attention to the problem and bad happen that may be happening around the world. We just through news can know about problems that different people in the world are faced with it. This awareness provides the possibility of helping people together. For example, if a volcanic eruption happens in a country and creates a lot of damage to people and buildings, most of the people even from different continent send a lot of helping box or money to help and improving their problem.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that it is very important to know about events happening around the world. because of, its important role in increasing public knowledge and attention to the different situation of happens in the world.
- TPO 45-integrated 3
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- TPO 47- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 63
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... lot of news networks around the world. Because all of happens in the world surely affe...
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Line 2, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...different cultures in the world. Todays, news networks interlock all of the parts...
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Line 2, column 121, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...world. Todays, news networks interlock all of the parts of the world together. In the pas...
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Line 2, column 190, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
... together. In the past, people had very few information about different people who ...
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Line 2, column 190, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little information'.
Suggestion: little information
... together. In the past, people had very few information about different people who lived far aw...
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Line 4, column 137, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Because
...bout events happening around the world. because of, its important role in increasing pu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74386920981 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4476825739 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463215258856 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7994340971 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.411764706 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64705882353 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269608981421 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104311992015 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105161607984 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199031831186 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100272501338 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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