TPO-54
When it comes to discuss governments have to invest in the arts rather than athletics, the statements are different form individuals to individuals. Some arguments seem convincing , however, I have my own opinion that the government have to put more resource on athletics. The following article explains the reason that I support it.
To begin with, the government pay more effort on the athletics that it will help the government to earn the opportunity to host big sport events. These events usually attracts several audiences to the location and helps the commercial busier than before. For instance, in my country, there was hold a national competition. This competition provided the local government monthly earnings increase about 20 percentage, and made the government to construct more facility to the public. As a result, it is worth to the government put the resource on athletics because it will pay back.
Secondly, athletics win the games can assist the government famous. When athletics win a Olympic in the first place, this athletics will be report worldwide and it helps the government to announce their well support to the athletic. For instance, the government sponsors the athletics to their training and consumption once the athletic win the game. The government has a chance to let others know our country without any cost and also gets the chance for more funds from the announced media.
Last but not the least, sponsor the athletic can make the republican has more willing to do the exercise. Nowadays, people seldom play the sport. If the government gives spend more money to the athletic will help the people do the exercise. Take my experience, there were an event from my government. People who could do the exercise continuously for a month, they could get the refund form the taxes. Therefore, there were many people tend to play the sport in order to get the target. In this case, the people are more healthier than before that also reduce the health cost for the government.
In conclusion, there are still some arguments whether the government should spend more money on which side. However, in point of my view, I stand my ground on the mentioned passage that the government has to pay more resource on the athletics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ividuals. Some arguments seem convincing , however, I have my own opinion that the...
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Line 5, column 88, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e government famous. When athletics win a Olympic in the first place, this athlet...
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Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...etics win a Olympic in the first place, this athletics will be report worldwide and ...
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Line 7, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...Nowadays, people seldom play the sport. If the government gives spend more money t...
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Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
... for a month, they could get the refund form the taxes. Therefore, there were many p...
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Line 7, column 517, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...he target. In this case, the people are more healthier than before that also reduce the health...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00530503979 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69432333562 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509283819629 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1758822813 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8571428571 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9523809524 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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