Governments usually have a limited budget, and they have to spend it as efficiently as possible, considering the priorities. While some people believe that arts are more critical to be supported by the governments, others believe otherwise. As far as I am concerned, I totally believe that the government should put more focus and investment in arts than athletics. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, investing money in art is a long time investment, and society will enjoy it for years. I mean, by spending money on athletics, maybe some athletes become champions for several years, but it will entertain people for a limited time. After a while, people will forget about those events or do not care about it anymore. On the other hand, art remains for centuries. When a great artist presents some excellent works, such as paintings or sculptures, people will enjoy it at that time. Also, after many years people still can enjoy and get inspired by those artworks. For instance, a few centuries ago, in Europe, the Italian government invested quite a lot of money on arts. Some great painters and sculptures arose at that time, such as Michael Angelo. These artists made some great artworks that people still enjoy and love.
Second, more extensive strata of the society can enjoy arts. If the government spends too much money on sports, only a small group of people, such as particular athletes or coaches, will benefit this investment. Although people may watch the events and enjoy it, but it will not be so widespread. In contrast, during a long period of time, a vast range of people will enjoy artworks. For example, the United States government invests a great deal of money in sports like basketball. Although many people watch it, they cannot inspire every person. Only those boys who live in developed countries and possess tall and huge bodies can pursue basketball. However, everyone from all over the planet gets inspired by the works of Leonardo da Vinci.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that governments should spend more money on arts rather than athletics. It is because artworks remain for a long time, and many people can enjoy them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, while, for example, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93650793651 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56254043415 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539682539683 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7072871609 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.1304347826 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4347826087 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5652173913 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147513139793 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432838950957 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496367203614 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109896265834 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430869018121 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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