TPO 56 Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social networking sites Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer and why Use specific reasons and examples
In this modern world, many people have different views to keep their information or picture on social-networking sites. In my opinion, keeping our experience with photos and other information to social media is a great record because of two reasons which will be discussed in this following essay.
To begin with, the majority of people can introduce themselves as a professional on social- networking sites. To be more specific, online media provides a considerable path for both employees and managers in order to link them to each other. Thus, people have a huge job opportunities and they can apply for them easily. My cousin’s experience is a compelling example of this. I remember of the years that he graduated from university and he applied for job, but he could not find his suitable job. I suggested to him for enroll on the LinkedIn. After that, he described all of his professional skills such as knowing important software, so that he could find a Germany manager to hire him. Had he not submitted his information on social media, he could not have hired on Benz company.
Furthermore, people can document their pleasant time in their life on websites. Indeed, in this modern age, it is important to save our information or other documents in different places because if we have lost them in one place, we can use them on the other sources. For instance, two years ago, I had a terrible experience in my life due to lose my all information. In fact, my laptop suddenly was stopped working because it ram was broken. unfortunately, I did not have any backup of my information. If I had documented my information and pictures on the social websites, I could have had renewed them.
To summarize, I firmly believe that people should keep their professional information and life on the social-networking sites. This is because they can get job as soon as possible and they can save their information on safe place.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rams'?
Suggestion: rams
...suddenly was stopped working because it ram was broken. unfortunately, I did not ha...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Unfortunately
...pped working because it ram was broken. unfortunately, I did not have any backup of my inform...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, thus, for instance, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8696969697 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97929956455 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521212121212 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8406861991 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5294117647 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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