TPO25-Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
Over the past few decades, the issue of whether young people helping their societies rather than before has received a great deal of attention from sociologists and psychologists. Although some may argue that the growth of the technology reduce the need of youngest's help, I as well as maney other believe that the role of the youth has been decline in society due to the changing the culture and the life conditions. I am of the opinion that both of these viewpoints have their own merits and drawback, and the follwing explanations will further elaborate on my perspective.
First and foremost, an paramount reason why the youth people in these days do not spend their time to help their communities is the growth of the technology. On the past centuries, the difficult activities were done by the participation of the people; however, in these days the life get more easier and such those activities can be done by advanced technologies. In addition, as the technology evolves, the young people get more involve and their time are consumed more than before by this technologies. This evolution not only involve people to other affairs but also it reduces their attention to have a beneficial role in their societies. For instance, youth nowadyas have computer, laptop, play stations and such other things which get their time and they less pay attention to the society.
A further reason for this view is that on before decades a limited number of people spend their time on education and other people find their job as soon as possible by reaching the young age. today young people, in contrast, should spend their time either on their education or their occupation more than before to obtain a high-level society position. In addition, it is occasionally said that the recent decades people are more selfish than previous. This means that they prefer their benefits rather than the societies benefits; then, the youngest people do not want to spend their time to help their communities to improve.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, I can draw a conclusion that in these days young people do not cosume their time to enhance their societies chiefly due to the growth of the technology and being selfish more than previous time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...my perspective. First and foremost, an paramount reason why the youth people i...
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Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...le; however, in these days the life get more easier and such those activities can be done b...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...r time are consumed more than before by this technologies. This evolution not only i...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Today
... as possible by reaching the young age. today young people, in contrast, should spend...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, well, for instance, in addition, in brief, in contrast, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97889182058 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68127630537 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474934036939 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.6351705631 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.153846154 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1538461538 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339244019544 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144161405169 0.076458572812 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989034678831 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231913774126 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699447644749 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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