TPO30: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours

As time goes by, there are some shifts on working styles and hours. Therefore, it has been a controversial issue that if people today will feel happier to work three days a week with long hours or five days with shorter hours. As for me, me believe working three days a week for longer hours will be more enjoyable, and my reasons are as follows.

To start with, I care about money, and working only three days a week for long hours allows me to make more money. If I can work at the office only three days, I can make use of three days to finish all of my weekly presentations for my boss, and complete all of my proposals quickly. What is more? I will have two more days to do other part time jobs. That is to say, I can work as a waitress at a coffee shop, or I can get some freelancer jobs. In the end, I could easily double my salary. However, if I have to work five days a week, I will be unable to do part time jobs since those works almost require a long period of working hours daily. Thus, working five days with shorter hours cannot make more money.

Secondly, I place emphasis on efficiency, and working only three days makes me more efficient and productive. For instance, when I was an intern at a media startup, I only had to go to office three days per week, yet I could always accomplish three journals and two poems weekly because I knew I did not have too much time to finish. Furthermore, I recorded myself when I wrote every article, so that I could efficiently manage my time. On the contrary, my friend, Julie, went to the other media company for internship, and she had to go to office everyday though her working hours was less than me. Nonetheless, she could only write one journal a week, and she told me she felt working daily indeed made her unproductive.

Last but not the least, I am a lazy person, and working only three days a week benefits me more than working five days. For example, if I have to go to the office five days a week, I should take the subway daily, which is tiring for me. Moreover, it takes me more than one hour from my home to the office. In contrast, if I could work only three days, I only need to take the subway three days, which means I could even save two hours weekly and lay on my bed eating breakfast. Evidently, for people who are lazy, working three days will be a more enjoyable working option.

To conclude, it is clearly more enjoyable to have a job where I could have to work three days even if I would have longer working hours daily. After all, I can obtain much more money, I can be more efficient, and I can enjoy my laziness.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...? I will have two more days to do other part time jobs. That is to say, I can work as a w...
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Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ive days a week, I will be unable to do part time jobs since those works almost require a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in contrast, on the contrary, to start with, what is more, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.24048096192 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27822308841 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432865731463 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3338303266 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6956521739 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21739130435 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.461167273872 0.236089414692 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162768808455 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10891901431 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310473245765 0.150856017488 206% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612709902641 0.0645574589148 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 10.9000537634 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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