The world is developing at such a fast pace that if we look back in time, we will find out that nothing has stayed the same.When it comes to the issue that whether people now are less happy or less satisfied with their life or not, due to the changing of the world, different people will adopt different attitudes towards this issue according to their experience and belief. Some people may think that because the lives were more simple in the past, therefore people were happier and more satisfied with their life, while I am of the opinion that, because of the improved technology and science, life has become easier and also there are many pleasant and exciting activities that people can do in their free time.
First of all, today in comparison to the past, because of the improvement of technology and the advent of high tech robots and automated machinery, many of the major tasks have become facilitated and consequently, most parts of human labor have eliminated. For example, In the past people had to work long hours to excavate the mines for excavating cole for different purposes, while today thanks to the electricity which caused our life easier and more facilitated. Moreover, it is obvious that today due to the improvement of medical science, most of the diseases have proper treatments and people can live longer and healthier. For instance, in the past, the mortality of children was too high and most of them died because of chickenpox and other infectious diseases easily, but now with the vaccination, the mortality rate of children is less than 1percent.
In addition, I am of the opinion that today people have many different options for spending their free time happily. Traveling, playing computer games, going to the cinema and many other things which were not available in the past, therefore there were not a variety of options for spending their free time pleasantly. For instance, today people can book a hotel and a flight in less than one hour and travel to where ever they like to go, which was impossible in the past.
To draw my conclusion, according to the above mentioned raesons, I think peopel are more satisfied with their life and all of us are living happier, thanks to the improvment of science and technology further than having this chanc to fill our free times with many different pleasure activities which provide us more happiness.
- The most important problems in today s world will be solved in our lifetime 70
- People can solve important problems by themselves or by their families thus it is almost not necessary to refer to the government 83
- Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea 68
- TPO 32 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 70
- the government should s end more on internet access or public transportation 66
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86029411765 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52503682867 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485294117647 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.8882775494 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 198.3 100.406767564 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.8 20.6045352989 198% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.7 5.45110844103 270% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272458647906 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11033772509 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682045667727 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169508916517 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853869074171 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.9 11.7677419355 186% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.34 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.002688172 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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