tpo44
Nowadays, the human need to spend lots of time in their business unless they can not afford the expenses of life. However, parents have another task which is more important than any aspect of life, even earning money. It is nothing except acting their parent task in their kids' life. Since they do not have a bunch of free time, they need to choose what activity is more beneficial for their children. Some parents hold an opinion that it is better to spend these times to help children with their homework, others tend to have some fun time with their beloved kids. Personally, I believe In the latter viewpoint because of its great effects on parents' and children's life. I will mention two reasons in bellow, both of which I think are more important.
The first reason that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue which is about parents life is the fact that these parents always struggle with affairs which are about working, money, problems, and etc, so they need to have some fun, really crucial matter to culminate themselves even in other aspects of life as their job, according to surveys. Can they have fun times if they dedicate their free time to do homework with their children? In my point of view, playing with their little angels will help them to have great moments which are like an engine to accelerate their progress in their working life. As you know anybody needs to be energetic to be a successful person in his or her life, nobody can tolerate heavy burden of working tasks if do not have fun times. There was a great investigation in my country about three years ago, published in all magazines at that time. The research was about this matter, effects of leisure time on the employee's efficiency at office. The results indicated that employees who had good weekends and vacations had considerably better performance than those who do not have; in addition, those who do serious matters on the weekend felt depression after a while. What is sweeter than having fun with your beautiful children at these times, giving you a great amount of energy.
Secondly, all children need to feel their parents in their life. It has irreparable consequences in kids' future life when they did not have a good relationship with their mothers and fathers. On the other hand, these little people do not like their assignment very much because most of them do it mandatorily, if you let them on their own they will not do even one of them. In my opinion, it is not affirmative for them to devote their leisure time to solve math or physics problems while they hate them already. Nevertheless, it will be a great moment if boys play for instance football with their fathers or girls play with dolls with their mothers. I remember when I was a child my father used to play football with me on weekends. He was my best playing mate that I loved to play with him all day and night. In addition, it was not only joyful for me but also it helps me to improve my performance at school because it gave me great energy. However, my uncle always forces my cousin to practice his math problems with him, since he thought it would help my cousin to reach great positions in his courses, but it’s the result was counter wise. Kids prefer to have a great friendship with their parents not other types of relationships like student and teacher ones.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments it is crystal clear that weekends and free times are not for studying or doing serious activities, on the contrary, it is about to feel free and do something which is in counterpoint with your regular weekly life. As you see playing with children on leisure times not only are useful for little kids but they are helpful for parents life as it gave them a lot of energy which is like propulsion for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 960, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
... matter, effects of leisure time on the employees efficiency at office. The results indic...
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Line 3, column 1082, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'bettered', 'welled'.
Suggestion: bettered; welled
...weekends and vacations had considerably better performance than those who do not have;...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i think, in addition, you know, in my opinion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 104.0 43.0788530466 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3162.0 1977.66487455 160% => OK
No of words: 684.0 407.700716846 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62280701754 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.11403887952 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40413297055 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 212.727598566 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450292397661 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 972.0 618.680645161 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.081319151 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.111111111 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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