TPO49-The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily
Friendship is one of the critical concerns of modern society. Needless to say that finding friends play an essential role in all part of human welfare. some people may think maintaining old friends ability more crucial than making new friends whereas others take the reverse. Even though, some thinks old friends are infinitely prefareble since they are rare and most of the times they are perfect whith most similarites. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that making new friends ability is most imprtant. The following reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.
The first fact that holds me this concept is that variable condition of people lives. it can be illustrated that every saconds people grown up their life variable, like work, town, family, more than the past; henc, they must have ability to overcome this conditions. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I realized that my old frineds had not enough time form me since they had lots of works and family concerns to take care about. After a while, I become so alone and I decieded to make new friends in our company. so, I make difficulty in order to make new friends and become so frastrated and that was time I need friends more than any times of my life. it can be seen, this hard condition wouldn't happen for me if I had the ability to make many new friends.
Another reason is that external conditions impose people to various situtation. I read several articles about how to make you life better in forigen country about three years ago at american society journal. they analyze the various impact of american people; hence, they assume that imact of friends on human lives are undeniable. On of the article estimates that approximately 30 percent of abroad students have difficulty in first year education program. I can remember my personal experience when I studying power electronice at the UTA university in the U.S. I had complicated social issue in order to make new friends and my old friends couldn't be touch in U.S. ; so, I become so alone only because of lack my making new friends ability in new geoghrapic places which my old-friends only be intouch by video call. Therefore, it seems reasonable to assume from this experience the ability of making new friends is mre important than maintaning old-ones.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, getting new friends is more critical. Not only because of the various condition changing throuth life, but also because of external condition like distance and geoghrapic which make old- friends useless. every people should make new friends entire of life and save perfect of them in order to increase quality of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93088552916 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60612659105 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518358531317 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.6179413775 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.714285714 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291712790659 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944808319635 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822104677752 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192938108112 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442726713205 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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