what discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country?
25 min.
Due to the accelerated technological development over time, the ability to observe micro structures in human body has also been improved. At past, what we can observe was no different from what we can see. With the advent of microscope, however, tiny structures such as cells, nerves, bacteria, etc. have been under our observation. Even though any scientific discovery has its own value, nothing could be compared to saving human lives. I think the discovery of mechanism of the immune system, eventually led to development of vaccine, is the most beneficial in not only my country, but also in the whole other countries in the earth.
First of all, the understanding of immune system bears a lot of potential. It is truly beneficial when one discovery is not limited to one case in point but spread to hundreds other applies For example, the cancer, the ultimate medical challenge in the modern, can be treated based on the knowledge of immune system.
Second, based on the knowledge of immune system, various types of vaccine can be developed. It is miraculous that just one shot of vaccine, hundreds of thousands of lives can survive. Especially in underdeveloped countries where the facilities for hygiene is that well equiped, the vaccine functions as essential
Considered the potential possibilities to cure other diseases and the importance of vaccine, the understanding of how immune system works is most beneficial discovery in last century.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, for example, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 43.0788530466 23% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1243.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 239.0 407.700716846 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20083682008 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94125891567 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598326359833 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.6820268331 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7272727273 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192525870746 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547966992118 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623672597274 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110864071061 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048920519923 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.