What makes live longer
Current educational system and technological progress has improved many aspects of our lives and increased it’s expectancy. I feel it for two compelling reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
The first argument relates to relatively high level of medical aid comparing with the past decade. A lot of diseases have become treatable. Moreover, nowadays technology allows doctors diagnose different inner diseases and viruses. For instance, in the childhood of my granny there was only one method from a headache, a backache, a hangover and a stomachache. People treat themself by attending the russian sauna, which called “banya”. The extremely high temperature sometimes helped, but sometimes people died soon after the procedure. Ongoing level of medical supplement has been immeasurably changed since those severe time what definitely made live longer.
The second idea in favor of the first is that universities constantly graduate many efficient doctors, who make professional treatment affordable for different social groups. People no longer need to wait their last day in pain. For example, cancler is truly horrible diagnose and, as I recently read in the article, the percentage of individuals who successfully were treated tends to increase each subsequence year. Little by little, lines to get hospital aid become shorter and the quality of treatment rises. In case of the necessity in medical aid there is always a qualified doctor nearby. I believe, these doctors had saved a lot of lives.
To sum it up, development of technology helps to investigate deeply hidden sorts of dangerous disease. Education system provides enough efficient specialist who can deal with those inventions and treat wide range of people. All of above lead to a long and happy life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: IT_IS[10]
Message: Did you mean 'its' (possessive pronoun) instead of 'it's' (=it is)?
Suggestion: its
...many aspects of our lives and increased it’s expectancy. I feel it for two compellin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1514.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 282.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36879432624 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87440605176 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.684397163121 0.524837075471 130% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6417599988 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1111111111 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123636744318 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270218018047 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618358156778 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557711116203 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361847124192 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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